even more

artwork by talantbek chekirov

you recline in the unmade bed
watching me 
in the lusty light of morning
the air conditioner hums
whilst i’m moist with passion’s dew
the dizziness of the day must begin
time for the costume of life 
to cover my nakedness

four breaths ago you stroked my skin
turning it into satin
making me love you
want you 
even more

Author's Note

artwork by talantbek chekirov

Reviews

[B J Hughes]

The gently sensuous ambiance begins with line one and simmers slowly thru the last word leaving the roaring passions of "four breaths ago" to the beauty of our imaginations. Love it! And the accompanying artwork is icing on a very delicious cake. 100/100

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, BJ, thanks so much. Lydi**

[B J Hughes]

Your welcome Lydi! Uh, if there's any left, could I have seconds on some of that cake?? :o)

[Lydia Shutter]

A good deal of my poetry is sensual in nature...it is the genre I enjoy writing most.

[B J Hughes]

Aye! Words from a tactile heart so eloquently plied. I"m finding much learning in your writing.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you!

[JerryB]

Oh boy! What a dramatic two lines these are.
The subtly of this poem aided and abetted such lines as these.
It isn't often such profoundness can be found.
Thank you for this poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Not sure which two lines you liked so much, but I thank you for the review and for letting me know! Lydi**

[JerryB]

Forgot to post the, sorry about that . . . Lydia . . . Here they are

"time for the costume of life
to cover my nakedness . . ."

[JerryB]

Heh.Heh Also liked the picture.

[Lydia Shutter]

:) thanks again, my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and words. A perfect journey into memory and beauty. You gave life to the beautiful artwork dear Lydia. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Lydia Shutter]

And thank you, my friend, for your kind review. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Lydia.

[Lyn Anderson]

Captured here beautifully, that feeling, when life takes over and you have to leave ... truly artful. As a writer, I feel clumsy in your presence.

[Lydia Shutter]

No need for you to feel that way. Nice to see you again! Thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

The lustful strokes of passion on a canvas
of artful overtures as morning rays of sun
begin the beguine... Your painting is exquisite...
truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Pat. I always appreciate your reviews. Lydi**

[Mary Helda]

A sensual and passionate piece of art for my valentines day eve,,it has brightened my day,,for afew moments i can actually smile and dwell in the beauty of this gem...truely poetic..very beautiful Lydia

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Mary. Lydi**

[Mary Helda]

You are welcome:-)

[ba_mcfarlane]

I love this. Writing of arousal from the feminine perspective, it seems to me that it is intense, more about a blending of romantic love and sex. Men are blunt instruments when it comes to expression. We miss the point. We too often stray to only the physical, I think because we are afraid and hiding from our feelings.
I wish that I had written this, written about a complete love.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much....you just gave me a Valentine's Weekend gift! Indeed, it is about a complete love. One has to have felt it to understand. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

.. you recline in the unmade bed -- watching me -- in the lusty light of morning.. '

for me those words conceal a secret,perhaps a chapter in a passionate novel about two true lovers.

What a wonderful chain of thought too, lydi.. what a weave of brilliant language. Almost tempted to say, 'Amen to that! '

[Lydia Shutter]

Put your hands on the radio...can I get an AMEN? LOL Yup, passion can be like that! Thank you so much dear Emma. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

Smiling across space.

[Cassie]

This is so so lovely as usual

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, sweet Cassie. Have a wonderful weekend. Lydi**