fine

fine

A Poem by Lydia


"the waiting room" by ron hicks





sleep is a foreign country
and my visa has expired
stress wrings every droplet of happiness
out of my soul
and look
there they are
my nerves
all clean and shiny
and dripping dry 
in the dish rack on the counter
and yet when you ask how my day was
i smile sweetly
and whisper, "fine"

© 2020 Lydia


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wow, this is different for you, but makes so much sense. And like me, you say fine...we don't think others really want to know how we are doing unless we can just say "fine" and move on.
So much kept hidden inside as we churn with pain or anger or sadness.
excellent write so many of us can relate to...
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

2 Months Ago

Thank you for your understanding review, Jacob. Lydi**



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just caught sight of jacob's opening remark and find myself echoing his words.. I have never been disappointed in your poetry Lydi** on the contrary, you are an inspiration .. and so bloomin versatile.. every now and then you surprise your admirers (of which I am most certainly one) by pulling something different and quite extraordinary out of the hat... this is such a good example of what I am trying to say and the picture used fits so bloomin well as always...

Neville x

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Neville

1 Month Ago


becuz ya worth it :)
Lydia

1 Month Ago

merci, mon ami!
Neville

1 Month Ago


...... Nis :) ing
As much as we are masters of communication we do tend to not express ourselves to well:( just ask a cat how his day is going he will tell you same for a dog:) but ask a human... nope not a word:( Hmm superior species us humans... LOL

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Lydia

1 Month Ago

How true! Thanks for the review, Robert. Lydi**
That's probably the best thing to say.. "fine".. because people are not ready for the true answer of their question. This poem is dark. I love it.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thanks so much, Lale. Lydi**
This is very powerful becuz I'm feeling a strong snarky tone that makes it seem as if this narrator is on verge of going unhinged & failing more & more at hiding it. This is delicious extended metaphor, giving the master Jacob a big ole run for his money! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Nah, Jacob always wins the metaphoric race! Thanks for the great review, Margie. Lydi**
thought this was great, Lydia, being sleep deprived myself most nights, can relate to this, some fairly raw graphics, mixed with great imagery, and that final word, was class, a small word with good and bad connotations

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thanks so much, Gram. I appreciate your review. Lydi**
holy moly ... raw to the bone .. i am right there .. such a setting and scene .. her character instnantly defined ...she is all women ... carrying on .. bearing the world .. and "i smile sweetly and whisper, "fine"...its from another generation Lydia .. my Aunts, Grandmothers and my Ma ... gentle and kind always .. my daughters on the other hand .. will not hesitate to express their jagged nerves ;) especially my oldest ... she learned herself to speak up .. demand respect and affirmation ... i love this poem for many reasons .. poetically there are no tricks up your sleeve ...the story is instant .. it flows beautifully .. builds to a sublime close .. i would like to share this with all my kids if i may ... pic is perfect as well says i!
E.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

1 Month Ago

Oh, E, you are more than welcome to share this with whomever you choose as long as my name is on it!.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

of course ... due credit .. i have a "Dad's Corner" i use to say dumb stuff i think is smart for me .. read more
This piece strikes a chord. Sometimes we choose to conceal our pains and anxieties because we don’t want others to be burdened by it.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Exactly, Gabrielle. Thank you so much for stopping by and for understanding. Lydi**
this strikes home
that thing called sleep is something I wish I could recapture at 2:30 every night.
These brighter nights are a bit less sufferable and birds at 4:00 are a pleasant diversion but sleep is becoming an ever rarer commodity and as you say, who wants to hear other people complain about their increasing frustrations
Pleasant dreams

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

2 Months Ago

Insomniacs of the world unite! :) Thanks so much for the review, Dave. Hope you get some sleep to.. read more
It's strange how we say that. Yes, we say we are fine when asked, when we may be far from it. We hide our true feelings, maybe because we don't want to burden others with our baggage. If only we spoke about our true feelings we may find some release. That old saying, 'a problem shared is a problem halved' has much merit. A poem which has a universal theme Lydi*. Well conveyed.


Chris


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Chris....always appreciate your warm reviews. Lydi**
So many times people say they are fine and they are not but the good thing is things eventually come around, like today, yesterday, the day before that am Fine, the fine you are speaking about

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia

2 Months Ago

Cassie, thank you so much. May your days truly be fine. Lydi**

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