on the other track

on the other track

A Poem by Lydia Shutter


artwork by pinkbunnylilli








traveling through the tunnel
i listen to the train
metal wheels going 
clackety,  clickety, clack
graffitied walls 
making no sense 
we speed by
i close my eyes 
feeling the vibration
my mind wanders
seeing rainbow flavored candies
dance before my eyes
my body sways with the movement
of the train
i hear bits and pieces of conversation
trying to compose a poem 
borrowing words that spark my interest
braiding them into what might be okay
my mind goes into overdrive
then rewinds, pauses, continues
willing my poem into existence
all the while certain
my destination 
exists somewhere on the other track

© 2021 Lydia Shutter


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Hello dear Lydia.
"i hear bits and pieces of conversation
trying to compose a poem
borrowing words that spark my interest"
I loved the complete poem. I am always listening, seeking new words, new emotions. I liked the above lines and thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

1 Month Ago

Often a word we hear in passing can spark an entire poem. Thanks for understanding, John. Lydi**
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

I agree dear Lydia and you are welcome my dear friend.



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Hello dear Lydia.
"i hear bits and pieces of conversation
trying to compose a poem
borrowing words that spark my interest"
I loved the complete poem. I am always listening, seeking new words, new emotions. I liked the above lines and thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

1 Month Ago

Often a word we hear in passing can spark an entire poem. Thanks for understanding, John. Lydi**
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

I agree dear Lydia and you are welcome my dear friend.
The tap of the tracks follows this poem of enlightment Lydi. Full of atmosphere and strange lighting. I love it.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago


Thanks so much, Ken. Lydi**
Loving train travel as I do.. eg. travelling from N. France to Milan, Italy - wonderful... I so feel the heart of your words, Lydi. Perhaps riding a train, experiencing those facts you so finely enclose is rather how we travel through life.. distractions here and there, focus varying.. one thing overwhelming the minute ago then diving headfirst into another emotion or experience. You, dear lady-friend, have taken that journey, and, somehow transferred the where one is.. to.. where one might.. could.. be, given the chance!! And yes, the destination might exist on the other track - but till the two are taken.. experienced.. who's to know! You really do set the mind in motion.. tis that swaying that does it!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Yes, the swaying of the train is mesmerizing and puts the passenger almost in a trance like state. .. read more
emmajoy

2 Months Ago

Waving across space to wish you and your family a happy celebration. Take care, keep safe - always. .. read more
Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Back at ya, Emma.
how interesting Lydi!! love the turn in closing ... and the ride .. i hopped a freight train (long time ago) and rode it for three days and two nights .. had I considered my destination might be on the "other" track .. i may have been riding them still. ;) the pic grabs me .. you poem held me .. the poetess squeezing her poems into existence with senses sparked ... the sights, sounds and motion you capture are ... well captivating says i! love those trains!
E.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much, E. So you were the hobo hopping on the empty cars, were you? I shoulda known! .. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

:) ..................................yep. tho the car wasn't empty .. another story in that. ;)
Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Well, you know I NEED to know the rest of that story! LOL
I can imagine and feel this my friend, I kind of have been there too, inspiration can come in strange ways, sometimes in complete stillness and sometimes in loud noises, love the ambiance of this one thank You for sharing and may your ink keep flowing~

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much, lighsong. I appreciate your review. Lydi**
Yes, the poem is often on the opposite track from where I am riding.
I love this piece...the mood of it, the sound of it...
and for me the soundtrack would be "poem on an underground wall" by S&G.

j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

All of S&G's lyrics are poetic in and of themselves really! Thanks so much, Jacob. Lydi**
Creativity is a strange thing. We can commit hours to working alone in a private room and nothing will come to us. Alternatively, we can be involved in another activity altogether, and words and images will come to us spontaneously. Perhaps I should take more train rides.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

There is something magical about a train. Thanks for the review, John. Lydi**
Dear Lydi**, many is the time I have taken the train to the west country to visit my mum. A two hour journey, so plenty of time to pen poems and I have certainly tried. However, it is so easy to become distracted. Your poem reminded me very much of the frustrations of trying to concentrate when there are so many other things going on. Lovely coastal scenery flashing by, the chatter of other passengers, the mesmerising sounds of train on track, ticket collectors, phone calls :) Do I finish any poems? No, but I usually manage a couple of drafts :) Thank you for taking me on your journey. I enjoyed the ride.

Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Glad you could relate, Chris. You have described precisely what I was saying. I appreciate that so.. read more
Hello, Lydia! :)
This was a fun read, all the sights and sounds moving with the train. Then you hit rewind, and it reminded me of the dark tunnels the train would speed through when I'd ride it in and out of the city growing up. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lydia Shutter

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Mattavelli. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

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