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A poem describing another's character

Taciturn conversationalist, you mirror all their jests;

Silent argumentatives, they produce such a mess.

 

Screeching in your statements, you lose you point with ease;

Changing their direction, they forget whom they please.

 

Spend your lungs screaming, there's not a lot to say;

Realizing they're ineffective, the masses swoon and sway.

 

No purity of objective, they fight until the death;

You fall into their loopholes, with nothing of old strength.

 

Empty speeches bubble, and hollow circles form;

Resolving nothing - talking, but various problems born.

Author's Note

I'm looking for serious and honest reviews.

Reviews

[LSS]

Lyndsay,
I'm not going to critique your work. You are a much better writer of poetry than I. I especially enjoyed a couple of your poems, (I'll go back and comment on them also). But this poem is so perfectly done to my analytical mind that I found it very enjoyable. This is also the first poem of yours that I have read that is not maudlin and emotional. I know women are supposed to be fixated on those subjects of passion and emotional upheavals, but I have found that inside women's minds is a much deeper creature. One of sharp whit and intellect, able to cross swords with any fine mind, not that I'm one of them, just a generalization. You probably won't find much income writing, but you'd be one of the ones to break thru if anyone.
Lar

[alyssa]

I LOVE ALL THE DETAIL!!!
lil sis

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Amazing use of words,Perfect flow,No spelling errors,
Once again I find no flaws!
There's your seriouse & honest review you wanted!!

[Display Name]

You seem to have a very candid look at someone you know very well.

[SJ Roebling]

Wow! Excellent use of words- great flow- reflects your incredible intelligence.
Look forward to reading more.

[Katherine Wyatt]

This could be many things, a couple rehashing the same old stuff, using blame and old events that get them nowhere..It could certainly be politicians..I think because it is so versatile in what it can cover it is very good. I particularly like, "No purity of objective, they fight until the death;" and the ending phrase I liked the best,
"Empty speeches bubble, and hollow circles form; Resolving nothing - talking, but various problems born."
This closing piece really shows how the negativity and the "anti-this---anti-that " mentality really is just pointless and get nobody anywhere ..and if anything just creates more problems.

WEll written.