Dreams

If I could hold the sun in my palm,
And demand it to be cool,
Have the wisdom, to make the wisest man,
Look like a bubbly fool,
I suppose I'd be god,
And,
Obviously that's not true,
It's just that dreaming and hoping is something I can't help but do,
I have always been a dreamer,
Seen through abstract eyes,
As long as my body follows laws of gravity,
My mind will live in the skies,
I'm afraid of what will happen when my imagination dies,
But of course,
"I'm a big girl now"
I can't spend all my days wondering why only the bird flies,
Or why anyone over age five is a fool if to she tries to,
Not my fault that I see shapes in the clouds,
Or that my dreams compared to reality are overly loud,
Or that inside me all anyone has ever found,
Are lose pieces of poetry and story floating around,
My dreams are my fiction,
Not my fantasy,
They haven't and may not ever happen,
But I'm gonna wait and see

Reviews

[Shawna]

I like it, kind of like a rebel yell against the whole "grow up and stop dreaming" sentiment. Don't worry, you need imagination and dreams as an adult just as much as you do as a child. Find the people who support those dreams, and never give up on them. Keep the magic :) not only five year old's can try to fly.

[Lyric]

Thanks ♡

[Robert]

You have a way with words in your poems. The word rhymes you have. I have tried that so many times and I am just real bad at it. But you do it so well. I like the piece very much. Keep writing.

[Lyric]

Thanks :-) really nice of you to say, and I'm sure you're not bad at it

[Tom McRoberts]

Reminds me of Neil Gaiman's writing. The dream-like fantasy framed in a down-to-earth, human voice. If I had any advice, it'd be to reinforce this a little more in the latter half of the poem. For instance, 'I see shapes in the clouds' is a little distant, and doesn't sell the theme as well as if you were to show the reader in some way what shapes she DOES see. All things considered though, this is already a solid piece. Keep it up, man!

[Lyric]

Thanks! But I'm a girl, don't feel bad everyone thinks I'm a guy on here for some reason I must be masculine lol

[Tom McRoberts]

Actually, I thought you might be based on the 'big girl' line. I call everyone 'man', regardless of gender. Sorry if it came off as presumptuous or offensive though.

[Lyric]

No no, I'm the stupid one I forgot I put that in there :-)