I need to see you...

This came to me at a moment-when I needed to wake up

 

 

 

I need to see you differently

Not as my other half

I am burying that in my past

I need to see you differently

For me to see you I have to trust

That is gone and survival is a must

I need to see you differently     

Not as my future, not as my king

That is why I have switched my ring

I need to see you differently

As someone who will soon depart

You are no longer there in my heart

I need to see you differently

For my beginning to arise

I am sorry you are not privy to my prize

I need to see you differently

And I wish you well, and to become new

For my love was right. Just not for you.

Reviews

[Walkingblind]

You've built up such a great reputation in my mind that I
have come to expect nothing but great poems from your hand.
This is a marvelous piece, that seemed to be written just after
your alarm clock woke you up tp a new reality. I could almost hear u
talking to yourself, telling your mind to be strong, reprogramming your
thoughts I am hooked to your work. Another great write Lyrik!

[Deadofnight]

oh ya, For my love was right. Just not for you. that line just says it all!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A very eligant goodbye.



I need to see you differently

For my beginning to arise

I am sorry you are not privy to my prize

I need to see you differently

And I wish you well, and to become new

For my love was right. Just not for you.



This is a very fine piece. It is well written and heartfelt.

[Angel's Lady]

Well, I do hope you woke up then...
Great write. Telling such a tale in so few words...sheer beauty in such a short space. Good job.

[crap]

totally agree with gordon, your last line is the best!!!!, wasn't a fan of the font change though, let your words speak for you. they are good enough by themselves.

[darkgurl]

I really enjoyed this write so touching but also beautifully written....Kim

[Gordon]

Really good "departure" piece. I liked the last line the best, "For my love was right. Just not for you." Ouch! That's got such deep implications.

Good write, I think you got it all out.

[Cคɾเ&#..]

"....For my love was right. Just not for you." I thought that was a beautiful line because it is si true to most sometimes. I loved it and you did a great job. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

"I need to see you differently

And I wish you well, and to become new

For my love was right. Just not for you."

Need i say more? This was the perfect finish to your poem. Your poem is so relatable it took me back a couple of years. I liked how you repeated, "I need to see you differently." It's almost as if your not speaking to him, but to yourself, repeating it so you don't forget. And as you near the end, it becomes almost easy for you to end it, even though its not easy. *i don't think i'm making sense*

Danni

[BlessedLove]

B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L....that was really sweet....words chosen so carefully...so precise...so touching. Keep writing...