The Chrysanthemums dance in red world

Is It really fair for a child to be expected to love their parents and respect them when their abusive scum? A poem about a child's revenge

The Chrysanthemums dance in red world

What a sin I am!
To shed red blood on a white world
Dirty and filthy
I'm a useless and lonely child
Castaway again
It's my fault I know!
This corrupted innocence was once pure
I was once the perfect child
I don't know when the lily began to wither
Suddenly I was to blame
You sound reasonable to my fractured mind
I can no longer comprehend the logic
But I'm just a child
I'm just not old enough to understand right?
I take the blame until you start to tear me in half
And then my consciousness decayed
I can't take it anymore!!!!
OH MOTHER DIVINE! WHY ARE YOU SUCH A FOOL!?
YOU ASK FOR MY HELP BUT GIVE ME NEGLIGENCE IN RETURN!
I stop trusting her and my heart beats with a strange euphoria
I claw and scrape at my throbbing chest
And in a splash of arrayed colors I taint the world red
I lay in a bed of chrysanthemums and look up at the white washed mirror
How pure and divine I am!
How perfect am I?
Tell me mirror? Was I wrong to stain this world red?
As long as nobody sees... Is it wrong?
I smile wickedly and pluck at the petals one by one
Right, wrong, right, wrong, right, wrong, right, wrong, right.....
I already knew that answer...
I blew the petals away and made a wish
I looked up at the painted mirror and smiled
I'm not alone
I am simply at peace

Author's Note

Criticism? Thoughts?

Reviews

[Blue]

You certainly pour all your heart on this one! I sense no holding back. May I suggest that you add more poetic touches? This is good just the way it is but I think it will be more powerful with minor revisions.

[MADAM]

Yaaa... I tend to write a poem once and just check for minor errors"^^) if I spend too long on a poem I loose my passion for the subject lol, so I agreex3

[Kai Rollins]

I already knew that answer...

Powerful stuff. Peace was attained at the very end. So he(she?) is troubled no longer. A bit like Spiders Thread in that right.

[MADAM]

In a way:D but this one actually has a story, unlike that one and it's much darker

[Saddam]

But I'm just a child
I'm just not old enough to understand right?
I take the blame until you start to tear me in half
This is very nice of you dear. You write it very well and clevery, a man is nothing when he is thinking of own negetivity but suddenly he realise his fault and then he rise up and say
How pure and divine I am!
How perfect am I?
I LOVE THIS A LOT!!!!!

[MADAM]

X3 thank you!

[Saddam]

you are welcome dear.