many days gone

ardency

i didn't see you it's many days
heart blows wet air but eyes don't cry
soul wants you but feet don't follow your way
it's long since i saw last and many days gone away
i didn't see you it's many days

Author's Note

hmm

Reviews

[L]

I love how the message of this poem is not lost in its expression. It's simple and true. It feels

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

I like the book ends! :o) Do hearts blow? I have dry eyes too. It can be difficult to approach someone we are attracted to. Don't let the opportunity to 'connect' slip away.

[Riley Mistwood]

very interesting

[de_maruf]

really?

[Riley Mistwood]

ofcourse

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Short-and-sweet :)

[Coyote Poetry]

If we don't follow. We can lose another. A poem of longing. Sometimes we decide a separation. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Linda]

Nice poem, it's short and very deep
I would just make some spelling changes and voila!
Other than that, this is a great piece of writing
Keep it up :)

[khalid]

i can feel the meaning and feelings but it needs more work to correct spelling and gramatical mistakes such as;
i havent seen you for many days
heart blows,
soul wants, feels, your way

it has been so long since.. i saw you for the last time

[william keepers]

I agree with Dayran, give her a call, or your narrator of this poem should. You have captured very nicely the fear of rejection that resides within the heart of those who long for the love of just one that is believed to be unatainable. Though perhaps the subject has not been met, her absence during times she is normally seen brings upon the anxiety of the opportunity of love being lost. Even though the love felt may be fantasy, the feeling is very real. Excellent job!

[de_maruf]

thanks a lot

[Dr. Wood ?]

HO..Hmmmmm

[Dayran]

Give her a call!!!

[de_maruf]

then how will i write it?