invisible touch

written a long ago

your trembling lip 

affect my soul and 

it also start trembling 

when it get your lips warm 

through my finger tips

i get about to cry 

presence of your silky hairy head 

on my chest for looking peace 

wish to believe as a happiest man

and when i get your heart theft hand 

in my hand and i felt you 

in my arm

i just say subconsciously_

someone i touch 

i lost myself 

someone i touch 

i lost my world 

someone i touch 

i lost everything 

but get someone in my heart...

Author's Note

invisible touch:(

Reviews

[Shaylynn H.]

It's not a bad poem - structurally or emotionally speaking. I suggest though that you take English and grammar lessons to help you if you're serious. It's like wanting to be a painter but not having the canvas or paint.

[Deron Alexis]

I agree correcting your grammar would add an elegance and increase the integrity of your poetry keep in mind that you should not let rules restrict your creativity

[Shaylynn H.]

Artistic licence however only goes so far when you're trying to reach a community of readers though, if you're writing for yourself - don't worry about it.

[Deron Alexis]

when that person you wish was there isn't and you imagine that they were or you always think and act as if they were very well put and versed

[Felicity's Eve]

Very nostalgic in a way...

Good poem! :)

[Neal]

This poem almost strikes me, but just doesn't quite make it for me. Is it happy, sad, or poignant?

[de_maruf]

it just feeling of one touch his heartiest one