Fall from Grace

A spontaneous free writing, because it wouldn't go away once I saw the picture of the first stanza in my mind.

Carnelian ice crystals
Circling azure blue caves
Powered by mystical waters and slow-rising waves
Two figures stand centered
Hands to heaven raise
To bring down the silence of faraway stars
Secrets forgotten from a time before

Words were not with them-
Heart to mind merged-
Invoking a goddess to vouchsafe this space
They stand, we would say,
Hours to days
Days to weeks
Counting none of the time
A place without measure
Eternal
One

Hands touching
sparks of fire ignite
Warming the caves
melting the ice
Slowing the motion of the spiral dance
Greying the azure
Breaking their stance

Keepers of fire now
Beginning to spread
one cave to another
As moments become
a passage of time
Measuring distance
Forming a land
No longer eternal
Manifest earth

If we were to remember the time before
Standing encircled
By mystical ice
Before there was distance
When life eternal
Powered our light
Peace would return

Author's Note

Don't ask me what it means. Like an impressionistic painting, I just saw the story through a hazy vision, wondering what it meant to say to me. Your guess is as good as mine. Then I wondered what the title was and the phrase "fall from grace" shot into my mind. Anyone care to interpret?

Reviews

[Saria Lon]

Breathtakingly beautiful words. I love the abstract style! I think sometimes poetry is best when it's written as you go like a stream of consciousness, when the words just come to you and make sense and paint a picture. It doesn't need a meaning; the images we see make us think about our own journey that the poem takes us on and that provides us with our own meaning we give to it.
When I read this, it really reminded me of the story I'm writing, especially how the ending will be like. This is awesome and thank you so much! :)

[Marianne Rose]

Thank you- it is so different than what I usually write- but I think you're right- the muse wanted the words down there, the story told, then each takes away something to think about relevant to them. I appreciate you helping me see it that way- I always think: I'm the poet, I should know what it means! But I too take something away from it that others may not see, just for me. I appreciate your words of encouragement.

[Inject Positivity]

All I can find through this write is a vast imagery projecting in my mind... The way you have described the story in the poem through powerful and very imaginative words was so amazing... It looks like the reader was taken to a world where all things occur in a mysterious way... Some works are beautiful even without any proper meaning to express with words but the effect they cause in the mind of the reader is so touching... A very different write from you, less words with more imagery...

Note: is there a typo in the second stanza first line with 2 nots? Forgive me if I'm wrong please... Just thought...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Marianne Rose]

Yes, so different it felt like it came from another time and place than the world I live in. I'm glad the imagery spoke to you- and thanks for the typo catch- maybe I should be content to leave it in the world of mystery, not understanding exactly where it came from it why it wouldn't go away until I wrote it down! Thanks for the reading and review!

[Diamond]

This gives a great image but to the end I felt as if I am doomed again....However, nothing stops. The beginning of another creation. Lovely.

[Marianne Rose]

Yes, it is a dark story, more a calling to remember who we can be. I understand the doomed feeling- this is what I am grappling with daily, so no doubt it will be reflected in what I write. Thank you for your insights and review.

[Teddybearlee]

Now keep in mind, simple mind here :) This was quite a tranquil reading, over all, I took an interesting message from it...action speaks louder than words...the line "Words were not with them" stuck with me through the entire reading, leaving me with the power of their actions, their thoughts, their intentions.

[Marianne Rose]

Thank you- an interesting interpretation, and it helps to know what stands out- that line struck me too. We fill the world with words, but where is our connection, beyond the words? It's still pretty obscure to me too, like a message from another plane I don't have the clarity to fully understand. Thanks for reading it and shining a light on that line.