Can't take me down

Can't take me down.

Ripped at the seams
I'm falling apart
She hears my screams
She listens to my heart
She likes what she hears
The emptiness inside
The slowly moving gears
She pushes it aside
It's not me she cherishes
She wants me out
She'll be glad when I perish
I have no doubt
She's about to take me down
She's almost won
But I start to make a sound
I start to see the sun
I'm the leader
I make the rules
And to you, my reader,
Which side will you chose?

Reviews

[lyssilou]

I really liked it Ki! But I have to wonder does someone really not like you or are you speaking on behalf of all the peoplee who get neglected. Any who I think it was a really good write and I give you 100/100. Haha! Keep writing. :)

[kelly]

i like it alot! the rhyming is really cool and the emotion is awsome. nice job dude

[Amanda]

Wow! great job. Nicely done :) all of your writing is so fun to read.