Battlefields

A poem...

I write from this battlefield

praying,

may my wounds be healed.

Raining in the trenches

of my mind

I seek your hand in mine.

 

In the torn streets of Italy,

narrow, winding

my mind rewinding

to you and me.

 

We’ve never met,

just letters,

missives

from a world that’s better,

Will you miss this soldier?

I study your words,

my beautiful girl,

-wishing I could hold her.

 

And I think,

-I could die happy with this,

just your words,

your soul in handwritten missives.

And if I survive…

And return home,

your words will keep me alive

I’m never alone.

 

I could live with hope,

laugh

and smile

even if we stay miles

apart.

There’s no distance with the heart.

 

And if I see you,

only when we’re old and grey,

I’ll smile,

because you’ll be an old friend that day.

Never a stranger,

never unknown,

because even miles apart,

your heart is my home.

Reviews

[Damien Davison]

Takes you right in to the desperate mind of a battle-worn soldier longing for a hold, something to grab on to in the midst of all the chaos. As if the one he is writing to's love is greater than the energy of war. I really enjoyed it man, good job!

[MachinaWriter]

Thanks man! totally glad you liked it, that's what I was feeling when I wrote it.

[not here]

Hi Machina.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
I'm just wondering about the change in tense around the end of the third stanza?.. It seems to change from first person to third person, and then back to first person in stanza four...
Aside from this technicality, I imagine this poem went pretty much where you wanted it to go. And that is always an achievement in itself.
I liked it

[MachinaWriter]

I just let the poem do what it wants to lol I imagine that parts of it are where he's speaking to her, and others are parts he's thinking to himself. Great thing about poetry is that it does stuff like this. It jumps and leaps and changes its mind lol

[Kelsey]

Wow. This is absolutely beautiful, my friend. So powerful, so touching, so many wonderful things that I simply lack the words. Absolutely amazing, my dear. x

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, as always. Its good to see your reviews again ^^