Chapter 1: It All Begins

Chapter 1: It All Begins

A Chapter by Macy A. Brown

          Today was a grey, cloudy day.  People's blinds were closed.  The strangest thing about today is that it's Christmas morning and there was no smile in sight.

   As I walked down the street I could hear the carolers bells scaped against their cases and and their hum turn sour.

   As the horse drawn carriges drawled nearer I could see the unstedines in the horse's steps.  I looked to my right and saw a man.  He had his hood over his head, and had a slimy, yellow, toothy grin on.  He had bags under his eyes that seemed to be the color of coal.

      Something about his presance sent a shiver down my spine. I listened closely again and noticed that the usual Christmas songs had been cut off and a strange voice came over the intercomes....

© 2011 Macy A. Brown

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you have the ability to invoke the right amount of mystery into something. nice touch, this seems like an amazing chapter drawing your reader toward more.

Posted 11 Years Ago

i want to know what went wrong really badly. this is a really good start.

Posted 11 Years Ago

wow! What could possibly have gone wrong with this christmas? Nice start, the suspense is perfect for a chapter one.

Posted 11 Years Ago

great chapter, really descriptive

Posted 11 Years Ago

Comma between grey and cloudy. Other than that small thing a brilliant beginning. You need to make the chapters longer though. I am interested to see what comes next. A Very good description in this scene. :) I really enjoyed reading it. Good job! Keep on writing so I can keep on reading!!

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on July 14, 2011
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Macy A. Brown
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I love to write of course! That's why I am on here. I am writing a new book named, "Christmas Morning" It's my first one and I come out with about two to three chapters a day. I love to play baseba.. more..