Timing

Timing

A Poem by LadyT

The music was loud and your voice tempting. 
The prejudice was strong and your charm delighting.
The crowd was big and your eyes fascinating.
The night was warm and your smile glowing.

Almost did I not close the door. 
Almost did I kiss you.
Almost did I let you in.
Almost did I fight my fear.

Told myself that it's for the best and that the timing wasn't right.
Told myself I find someone else.
Told myself that I then will get it right.
Told myself you would have hurt me anyway.

Then one day we saw each other again and I knew the only thing I was and am right about is this:

Timing is a b***h.

© 2019 LadyT


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Ow. Haven't we all experienced something like this in the past (unless you haven't dated anyone yet, that is)?

It does make me pick up a hidden question, though: is it really the timing or is it you who were indecisive? Interesting. The more I think about this, the more this question becomes apparent in my mind. When I finished reading, it made me ask, "why blame it all on timing?" Nevertheless, I can hear the bitterness in the viewpoint character's voice and I understand. Fully.

I'm a bit confused on "Almost did I not close the door," though, but it's just a minor nitpick. Still holds up, regardless.

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LadyT

1 Year Ago

Well I used "Almost did I not close the door" to show the decision not to date that person after he .. read more



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I like the poem, it's something many people would understand. For me anyway, this made it predictable, but I enjoyed it nonetheless. Plus it's very descriptive and the punch made me scoff, was it supposed to make me laugh?

Nice LadyT

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lol I love the twist and your rhythm

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ow. Haven't we all experienced something like this in the past (unless you haven't dated anyone yet, that is)?

It does make me pick up a hidden question, though: is it really the timing or is it you who were indecisive? Interesting. The more I think about this, the more this question becomes apparent in my mind. When I finished reading, it made me ask, "why blame it all on timing?" Nevertheless, I can hear the bitterness in the viewpoint character's voice and I understand. Fully.

I'm a bit confused on "Almost did I not close the door," though, but it's just a minor nitpick. Still holds up, regardless.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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LadyT

1 Year Ago

Well I used "Almost did I not close the door" to show the decision not to date that person after he .. read more
Interesting...a bad first date perhaps? LOL. Btw..I always thought karma was a b***h and timing was a mother f***er .

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LadyT

1 Year Ago

Haha thanks it was a party at the village I grew up in and he was the older brother of a friend. We .. read more
Alan

1 Year Ago

what kind of place did you grow up in where the VILLAGE has a party? I wanna go..lol

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Added on September 27, 2018
Last Updated on January 8, 2019
Tags: Love, Drama

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