Paralyzed

Listening to Comatose by Skillet and Just came to me.

I lay here,

Paralyzed.

Wishing I could say,

"Please don't worry".

Because,

You all look to me,

With worry -

And shock.

I can see through your masks.

I can see through your guards.

I can see through your eyes,

Right down to your souls.

I can see the pain you think you're in.

I can see your thoughts,

All written across your faces.

I lay here comatose.

I lay here motionless.

I lay here numb.

I lay here silently.

I lay here,

Paralyzed.

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

I really like this poem. I've had several friends and relatives that have been in comas for a long amount of time. When they wake-up, this is what most of them describe to me. They remember people brushing their hair, people talking to them, people massaging their feet. It's a great poem, in my opinion.

[Blue tailed kite]

A very good poem.... sometimes when we go through too much we end up feeling numb.... I really like the way you have written this poem, expressing how paralyzed you feel, great write

[Wicahpi]

Skillet who? hahaha
God I feel my age sometimes :)
What a depressive state to be in
and to hear everything and not be able to respond...

[VincentRayne]

I like the dark and gloomy tone it has to it as well as the poem has you thinking what is going on at the same time. wonderful!

[Scott A. Williams]

Very good repetition, does well to emphasize the dark tone of the poem.

[topsyturvy]

I love Skillet btw, lol just wanted to say that. Anyway, this poem is a bit creepy and sad and hmm there's another word I wanted to use I'm not sure what, but I've been through this experience before and the overwhelming pity one gives when they see you unmoving, lying down on the bed, not knowing when you'll wake or move again.. That's what kills the most. Watching them suffer alongside you, wanting to comfort.. Anyway yeah, hehe, I loved this poem coz it shows exactly how one feels when put in this kind of situation.

[Desert Dreamer]

Your poem gives power to the image of being paralyzed, as if you can now see into peoples minds. In silence, our power of observation increases.

I have not heart the song Comatose.

[HereWithoutYou<3]

I like it a lot.

[Ashley.M.E]

This is another really good poem. Well done.

[Rae]

I love that song. It is rather inspirational at times. I like the way you write your poems. Nice job. :)

[Lilly Tagloff]

I really like how you portray the reality of being paralyzed, in any sense of the word. I also enjoyed the way this is set up.