Please Stay

Please Stay

A Poem by Manda
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He is forced to move away and leave her behind. As much as he wants to stay but his parents wont allow it. She begs him to stay...but as much as she pleads he has to say goodbye...

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Your making me cry

Why do we have to say goodbye

Dont move away

Dont leave me here

We are so happy

Theres not a day that goes by

That I dont think of you

Everyone knows were perfect together

We have been through so much

Our hearts were meant to be together

Dont let me go

Just hold me in your arms forever

You want me forever

I know

And I want you

But our parents

There spreading us apart

They know how we feel

....They dont want us together

I dont give a damn what they think

So please

Im begging you

Stay with me

Spare me these tears

And just stay

Dont say goodbye

I cant bare it

I would die

My life would be endless torture

....

I love you

And I dont want you to go

So please

Im begging you

Dont end this

Stay here

With me

....

I dont want to keep begging you

I dont want to cry

I dont want to see you go

So please

Stay with me

And dont let me cry

© 2009 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
wrote this fast....i know theres grammar mistakes, but this is really happening to me. And I repeated things for a reason.

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Whoa. This really seemed to come from the heart.
Moving is tough. I would know. Leaving people behind is the hardest part.
Don't cry because it might be ending, smile because it happened.

Your poem really hit me hard. It had a lot of emotion and passion in it. I really do hope that things work out for you, and I know that they will, somehow.
It may not seem like it right now, but everything is going to be OK.

Spell check might clean it up a bit and give it a little more impact, but the rawness of it makes it feel more passionate and hurried. It's great both ways.

Well done.
-MAYA!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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*tear*
i move every two years and the last time i did i left someone i loved behind,
we still talk over the phone at night and stuff but feel bad and lonely because i know i'll never see him again.
this was really intense and hit me right to the core.
nice work!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like this write, I thought this was really well expressed. So full of wonderful expressed feelings here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


What a great poem! I can really relate to this because one of my best friends is moving and I'm going to miss him so much! I could really feel the emotion in this poem! Wonderful poem! I really liked it! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very emotional! Im sorry this is happening to you! I know what it's like. The line "there spreading us apart" I think you should substitue spreading for tearing or breaking or a synonym whichever one flows! I think your poem is very strong, very emotional like I said. Your repetion of things, phrases words etc. are useful in the poem. It shows the desperation. It shows the reader how bad you want and need him to stay neverminding what your parents think. Good start, there are some grammatic errors but you can fix those easily. Great poem, it is moving, emotional, and strong.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A raw and emotional piece. It clearly captures the inner turmoil experienced when faced with an unwanted separation.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Whoa. This really seemed to come from the heart.
Moving is tough. I would know. Leaving people behind is the hardest part.
Don't cry because it might be ending, smile because it happened.

Your poem really hit me hard. It had a lot of emotion and passion in it. I really do hope that things work out for you, and I know that they will, somehow.
It may not seem like it right now, but everything is going to be OK.

Spell check might clean it up a bit and give it a little more impact, but the rawness of it makes it feel more passionate and hurried. It's great both ways.

Well done.
-MAYA!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Love is hard but if you're truly meant to be together it'll all work out. A very emotional piece. I hope all goes well with you. Nice job =]

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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