Oh God Please!

Oh God Please!

A Poem by Manda
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Just when I think I have found everything, God has to go and change things. I dont know what I want or even what I need. All I know is that I'm confused and supposedly falling in love

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Oh God please
Dont do this to me

Just when I think
I have found the one

You have to go and
Change things around

I thought I knew
What exactly I wanted

What I needed
And loved most

But now...
Its all just a blur

Oh God please
Dont do this

I beg of you
Please dont

I cant have you
Playing with my heart

I am not capable
Of loving everyone

I especially cant be falling in love
With my very best friend

God its not possible
It just isnt

God please
I beg of you

I cant love him
Not when I already have

© 2010 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
I have to vent. I have to write this out. I just dont know what to do! I cant be feeling this way! Especially with HIM! Oh dear lord! Well I hope you like this piece! And if you dont I am so sorry. I dont feel like this is one of my best pieces but I just needed to let it out... I dont know about the ending. It seems ok for now but I want to know what you think bout it. If you dont like it then dont rate! Please...! Just give your advice or comments! I am trying to raise my status! Thanks =)

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Hmmm, interesting! You captured the feelings of desperation and inner struggle really well here, and I think that this whole situation of it being a battle is something that a lot of people are able to relate to. I thought that the beginning started off a little weak, but I really liked how you ended your piece. :)
~PaperHearts

Posted 10 Years Ago


Why not? Love strikes as and where it will.Just accept it.
Nothing to with God yoiu have free will

Posted 10 Years Ago


I do. Because I have the same issue. I feel in love with my best friend also. I didn't mean for it to but it did and love her with all my heart. This is a nice poem. Nice work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very Good! Venting is always good too! I am also having these types of feelings about a best guy friend of mine, and yes, it doesn't seem real to us. But yes, it is how our mind and feelings treat us.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I know how you feel. I''ll pray for you. Good writing. Everyone needs to vent sometimes.

Posted 10 Years Ago


its all part of our life dearest...and we all get messed up...so live and forget..let your soul guide you...lol

Posted 10 Years Ago


There are mistakes here and there, the flow isn't great or the rhyme scheme but that's nothing that a re-write can't fix. Also I think you accidentally messed up these lines:

I thought I knew
What exactly I wanted

I think you meant, I thought I knew exactly what I wanted. Try a re-write to clean it up a bit. Overall it was a decent write. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I agree that this isn't one of your best pieces - at least in terms of being a completed, polished piece. However, it ranks very high among your more recent, straight emotion pieces. Remember that writing doesn't have to be perfect in order to be PERFECT. As long as the thoughts and feelings of the writer are carried to the reader, the writing is perfect - a task which this piece aptly does.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was very good. I liked it because it was set up like a prayer, begging The Lord for guidance. I think I know exactly what you're going through. I have this friend...and we are very close and we dated for a while but it got too awkward because we were best friends. But then I started to develop feelings for him again. It's hard. The ending really was good. It was strong and powerful. You should keep it. It was emotional and I could relate. I loved it. :):)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I Hate When These Things Happen):

Posted 10 Years Ago



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