Oh God Please!

Oh God Please!

A Poem by Manda
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Just when I think I have found everything, God has to go and change things. I dont know what I want or even what I need. All I know is that I'm confused and supposedly falling in love

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Oh God please
Dont do this to me

Just when I think
I have found the one

You have to go and
Change things around

I thought I knew
What exactly I wanted

What I needed
And loved most

But now...
Its all just a blur

Oh God please
Dont do this

I beg of you
Please dont

I cant have you
Playing with my heart

I am not capable
Of loving everyone

I especially cant be falling in love
With my very best friend

God its not possible
It just isnt

God please
I beg of you

I cant love him
Not when I already have

© 2010 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
I have to vent. I have to write this out. I just dont know what to do! I cant be feeling this way! Especially with HIM! Oh dear lord! Well I hope you like this piece! And if you dont I am so sorry. I dont feel like this is one of my best pieces but I just needed to let it out... I dont know about the ending. It seems ok for now but I want to know what you think bout it. If you dont like it then dont rate! Please...! Just give your advice or comments! I am trying to raise my status! Thanks =)

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The ending got me. I wanted to know more. I'm not sure "I already have" is a bold enough statement to twist the end or not, but I do get the sense that it tells a part of the story. Overall, I really like the poem. Would you rate mine?
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/luckylifetwo/529960/

Posted 10 Years Ago


You got it right. This is how life seems sometimes. Tragic.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is a very emotional poem. You could focus on your form a little more. recently all of your poem are couplets. The poem I commented on was interesting in this form because it was between two people not wanting to be separated but is separated so it played a coincidental role too. I also like how you're conversing with God. Good job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow =) Very powerful.
The emotion screams through in this piece. It's very intense and overwhelming. Loved it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I so agree with this! Anyway, I think it was great. You know, you don't HAVE to have 2 lines per stanza, right? It would be nice to see you mix it up every once in a while. But I did like it. It's not as bad as you think!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very powerful and emotional, struggling with your feelings for someone, such heartfelt desperation!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I liked how much emotion you put into this, and the fact that it's not something you're faking makes it even easier to relate to for the reader. The best writing comes from personal experience, I always say. :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


This discusses so honestly the confusion one experiences when the world seems to change.. our hopes or expectations dashed... alterered.. Powerful words...

Posted 10 Years Ago




I loved it too!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great poem

Posted 10 Years Ago



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