Earth

A simple poem about the beauty of Earth.

Dou you feel it?

Do you see it?

The beauty of earth,

its everywhere.

 

Stop and smell the flowers.

Inhale the fresh air,

Can you smell it?

The incoming rain showers.

 

Do you hear the pitter patter of the rain.

It clouds up the skys, darkens the Earth.

Yet it fills it with life,

with rebirth.

 

Flowers blooming.

Trees growing.

Caterpillars cocooning.

Do you see it?

 

The Beauty of Earth is everywhere.

Take your time,.

Inhale the air,

Smell the flowers,

Feel the rain.

Its all there,

Its all one beautiful work of God.

Its Earth.

Author's Note

Ignore the punctuation errors. To me, my poems don't seem right If I don't use my way of punctuating.

Reviews

[Nichole]

Well, for one, you misspelled "beautiful" in the last stanza and "cocooning" in the second-to-last. You may want to start by correcting those, first and foremost.

Errors aside, let's look at content. I'll be honest, it's a bit corny and melodramatic overall. You have a few good ideas in there, but they're masked by how unfortunately generic the piece is.

I don't mean to sound so negative and hope I haven't offended you too much. I just hope you can take what I've said to heart and use these ideas to improve, because no one's good at poetry right off anyway and we all have room to improve, really. Over time, I'm sure you'll develop and your work will begin to reflect the true effort you put into it. And to that, I say good luck!

[Piikapoka]

You don't need prior planning for a poem. A poem is supposed to come form ones, thoughts, feelings or heart.
Its is an okay poem.
i can see what you mean by earth, and life. But this poem, seems to be telling me and not showing me why i should love earth.

[Manny77]

Just wanted to add that it might be a bit rough because I just felt like writing something. I simply opened the add Writing page and wrote about the firs thing that came to my mind, Earth. I had no prior planning or anything of the sort. I still think its pretty darn good tho but thats my opinion.