The Sweetest Breeze

The Sweetest Breeze

A Poem by Just Manoosh
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For my husband, he who forever moans he cannot understand my poetry. Something small, perhaps a "work-in-progress". Mx

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The Sweetest Breeze
 
When I see clouds, you call the sun,
When I need help, to me you run.
When I need space, you let me roam,
When I am tired, you are my home.
 
When winter comes, you are my coat,
When the music fails, you are my note.
When cruelty strikes, you are my shield,
In natures greatness you are the field.
 
 

© 2009 Just Manoosh


Author's Note

Just Manoosh
You are the sweetest breeze my love.

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It may be a work in progress but being small doesn't make it any less great. The rhyming was a pleasure to read, it sounded natural and unforced. Perhaps it's because the imagery is wonderful and yet so simple

'When winter comes, you are my coat,
When the music fails, you are my note.'

Very cool. Very sweet.

Thanks for sharing

Samith

Posted 13 Years Ago


my husband isn't much about such things either . . . but sometimes he 'gets it'. He looked at me one night and said, you need to make sure you make time to work on the important things. When I asked him what he meant, he said your poetry. I was astounded. I wonder if I would be so understanding about his passion.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Can I quote you?.. J Manoosh poetress
what a lovely, brief, sweet, sentimental journey you've taken us on ...
I can fully relate to this... Our husbands must be from the same mold.
Sweet Breezes to you always...
GBU

Posted 15 Years Ago


Awe now that is such delightfully sentimental and full of such admiration for your unconditional love.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Oh, how i wish for a girl to say these words to me someday, though i think that day will never happen =/ But just wanted to say that this was incredibly beautiful and loving in every way. Very romantic piece :)

B.A.

Posted 15 Years Ago


This is simple, sweet and wonderful. Yes, he will understand this. Beautiful Manoosh!!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great Right! Love the flow and emotions of your Love!! it sounds eerything is going good woth you two, but how can he not get your writing ,lol! Keep up the good work! B.P.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww, this really is incredibly sweet! Such heartfelt sentiments... Absolutely adorable and precious :]

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Just Manoosh

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