I dare to look back

I dare to look back
Our cool moonlit evenings together
The way my jacket suited you
As you held onto my arm
And how my name sounded different when you said it

My black smoke breath
You kissed me all the same
And didn't mind not liking the taste
You only wanted me with you

The warmth you brought on a cold night
The simple sweetness of your smile
The promise to make a good wife

Nowadays your skin still shines
As I cling to you and cough

Too deep in and weak

To dream of fighting back

You worry about my health
As my chest grows tighter
And my every muscle aches

You’ve put a crucifix on the wall
To guard my health
And removed the mirror from your dressing table
So my pain is not reflected

Two souls now at odds with one another
Caring out of duty
Concern born from guilt

And I'm sorry

Reviews

[The Random Writings Of ..]

As I read this, it makes me think back to so many things we all could have done differently. This piece has so much meaning behind it, the love that first brought you together, true soul mates - one because even though your black smoke breath was was unappealing - the love blossomed. The tenderness and care. The brightness you see in her still, the care and love she holds for you to mask the pain. This is a lovely write. Yes easy to understand, yet the feelings of love are so complicated - true love at it's finest. It is rare that you find someone to share such a life with and I envy you for that. Thank you for sharing this tender loving peace.

[Abhishekizy]

Thats perfectly alright...i just hope you don't sway me into the sweetness of love.... and its madness.

[ame]

You called in the middle of me listening to a forgotten song and I came to read your quiet words. Timing was perfect and together we entered a moment of reminiscence as the words exploded into my lonely memory. I heard the raindrops of melancholia generated by lashings of tears which told of days in the past - painful and so long ago, that I'm not sure if they were real or just a dream. The rising smoke of contentment made me choke. A wonderful moment. Thank you.

[Ruth]

Makes an impact, that's for sure!
The degradation of such loss is hard to bear and the actions, lacklustre in their laments are remorsefully bitter to take!
Powerful work
xoxo

[Kat Wildd]

Very well written, this poem explains very clearly that love is at once simple and complex. I love it.

[Lily Mae]

I'm not really sure if I have adequate words for this.. Your work amazes me. I drown inside them and play the images like a mini movie in my mind. This is haunting and lovely at the same time.. The bittersweet of life and love and choices..xo Awesome penning my friend..xo

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Wonderful read and write. The depths of love keep us from drowning.

[Jolie Blossom]

every stanza was better and better and the last just made my heart hurt a little. love is true and unconditional but no one said it was easy. nice poem mark!

[RaspberryBullets]

I love it. Very beautiful, very meaningful, in a sad way.