Dancing in the Moonlight

            Dancing in the Moonlight

You come to me as evening stars begin to shine

soft music in the background is scarcely heard

loud enough to dance, slowly, as one we move

Tender clasp of warm arms, touch of smooth cheeks

arm about your slender waist holding you gently close

your breath upon my neck as we move across the floor.

Twirling as a leaf fluttering down from a branch on high

dipping to the beat, the rhythm that will not be denied

eyes gazing up at me, expressing love you cannot hide.

The dance goes on, forever staying in each others arms

staying until the stars no longer shine, stay as sunlight peaks

above towering trees and the music is gone.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

You know I'm not into love poems, so I was a little bit apprehensive when this one started out seeming like it was mostly describing the physical aspects of a couple enjoying a dance. The reason your poem caught fire for me is becuz of the way you crafted the tempo & intensity in a way that felt like your message was "taking off" . . . you go from the literal physical aspects of two people . . . then we're floating away into more ethereal imagery from the forest . . . this is what makes this poem strong! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dave]

Margie - I'm glad you read it despite your aversion to love poems. Surely you, of all people, must know by now that I am an incurable, unapologetic romantic in writing of love.
Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Another love poem filled with tender romance. There are some really nice lines here. Your breath upon my neck is so sensual. Twirling as a leaf fluttering down is another. That is line incredibly visual. Dancing in the moonlight in each others arms. Nothing better Dave. Lovely job.

Chris

[CD Campbell]

I'm trying to think of a way to say that this is truly romantic in the gruffest, manliest way possible and failing to come up with anything. Ha. I really like the imagery of soft cheeks, bare arms, and the simple act of enjoying each others company under nature. Superb write, Dave.

[Dave]

Thank you - nature, romance enjoying one another, what more could anyone ask for?
Take care - Dave

[Dave]

Chris - I'm glad you like it. I find myself drawn to moonlight, dancing and of course romance.
read moreChris - I'm glad you like it. I find myself drawn to moonlight, dancing and of course romance.
Take care - Dave

[CD Campbell]

Dave, you responded to the wrong review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a nice mood set here...really like the "twirling as a leaf fluttering down from a branch on high/ dipping to the beat"----
yes, if only the dance could go on forever.
j.