The Cork Board

Amy J's favourite poem ;)

On the biggest corkboard that I have ever seen

is pinned everything that ever was

everything that is.

The arts that keep us alive

The sciences that advance us 

discovered in nature's laws

created from scratch, from the raw

the pins connect everything to everything else,

the order it's in scattered in chaos.

The corkboard lays hidden in plain sight on the floor

awaiting the great who will hang it up on the wall

and it may be one it may be more but once the treasure

is found together they'll soar. 

Sprinkled with ideas that were just opinions once before

the opinions of them

the facts of us

were never before, will always be.

Now things can be taken off and replaced

but things must be done before a contribution is made. 

On there are clues as to what must be done,

you will know what it is, it will call you

you're one.

If there's no room left then clearly everything it does not represent.

Once looked at enough and in memory kept tear down the norm, 

punch holes through the cork, change it's shape it's form. 

Then rebuild with new, use old materials too.

And when everyone else has caught on and are in a state of confusion, 

you would know it then to be the beginning of the revolution.

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

You're themes are expansive and well considered. It is the intellectuals duty to the world, the requirement incumbent upon us to recognize our gifts and responsibility to use our gifts to illuminate the human condition and move forward the evolution or our society.

NOTES: Your final stanza needs another pass for clarity and to lead the reader to a satisfying dénouement.

The copy could use some minor tweaks for grammar and spelling.

[Mister_Sir]

This is an excellent poem, Martel. It provides a mature celebration of the arts and sciences that I have never seen before. My favorite stanza is the third. The line "Sprinkled with ideas that were just opinions once before" is powerful in that it shows that all great science starts as simple inferences and eventually evolve into grand discoveries. And the universality of that these ideas is also eerily beautiful. I also like the line "If there's no room left then clearly everything it does not represent." Coupled with the next two lines, it provides an excellent reflection of the constant improvement of scientific understanding, that, regardless of what we know now, there will always be more to learn and a better understanding as humanity grows intellectually. This is also found in your line "Then rebuild with new, use old materials too." It is amazing how the scientific method, which is centuries, if not millennia old to some people, has been able to faithfully bring forth progress, and will most likely continue to do so. And the last two lines are also brilliant. They remind me of a quote of my own: "The birth-bang of progress is controversy." Such is the nature of humanity's growth.

Neurotically yours,
Mister Splitbrain

[Confuser]

Wow! I am so happy that you asked me to read; this pulled me in like a marlin from the sea! What a fantastic poem; You Martin Martel are without a doubt a very talented writer. Now, let me see, the idea of a corkboard as a metaphor is a fabulous idea-it is us; it is you it is whatever ideals come and go, and I believe you are saying: wake up people, open your minds, everything is here, you just have to look and if it doesn't work that way; hey why not do it anothe way; change is everywhere and nowhere. I just loved it. Now as far as me being a "top reviewer," I suppose you mean I read a lot? Well, in order for me to learn, being a novice; I must read, No? And it is not only fabulous poem like this; people will miss out; sometimes I am dumbstruck at the words I read from new writers; thinking wow, what if I had a "pretermined" idea after reading a couple of poems; so my mind is open, believe MM, I'm rebuilding grey matter; it's probably falling in clumps quicker than I can rebuild it. Thank you again. Bravo! Loved it & You don't need to change ONE thing!!

[Arthur Martel]

Waw! What a wonderful delight it is to wake up to a review such as this! Haha a marlin from the sea, what a wonderful simile! Well by a top reviewer I mean that your name is always in the 'Top Reviewers' section and so you are a top reviewer for all to see and know! It is an earned position and I'm very grateful for this review! :D

[Confuser]

I have NEVER seen it! Ever, I get on here, follow the lead; somebody reviews mine; I go to them; next I look at requests. I am not computer savvy at ALL! I am A to the DHDDD; seriously, I just figured out for certain how to get to profile, then click my writing and I see read requests. I don't know how to get directly to them. Dale

[Lizardo]

Wow this poem is really powerful and has a lot of potential in it
Your words are real wisdom Martin
Love this poem!

[Arthur Martel]

Thank you so much my friend!

[Lizardo]

You are welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Old ways and ideas.
"If there's no room left then clearly everything it does not represent.
Once looked at enough and in memory kept tear down the norm,
punch holes through the cork, change it's shape it's form.
Then rebuild with new, use old materials too."
The above lines are logical and very cool. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[ANTO]

Never leave the world the way you found it Martin, is what I got from this - change it for the better - and then you will have caused a revolution because good deeds change this world for the better.
thank you for this inspiring write.
:))

[Belle]

This is a really innovative metaphor. I particularly like the line: "The corkboard lays hidden in plain sight on the floor, awaiting the great who will hang it up on the wall..." I love the concept that all the ideas in the world are just waiting on some abstract plane for someone to "pin" them and use them. Your final two lines are beautifully executed; they leave a poignant, lasting impression.

[Amy J]

Yayayayayay! I've always loved this! Thank you Mr Martel x