the break

The final break,
(not sharp and crisp
as I imagined

but twisted
and bent )

seizes up,
and I hear myself,
like a thousand
cicada stridently
repeating reasons

while, moth-like,
you beat yourself
against my door.

Let me in
Let me in
Let me in
Let me in
Let me in

Reviews

[David Scott]

A bending... Yes, this is more accurate most of the time.
I like the perspective you write with here.
So casual, yet very stern and steely.

[tk]

short but well written. :) it's haunting me.. it's kinda creepy, but in a strange way. great job on this!! ^_^

[Leslie Philibert]

Great poem, you express emotions in simple powerful language,it`s the kind of poetry I like,poems that are not overworked but describe universal situations and then suddenly deliever a real strong metaphor.Well done.

[Sarah]

Really powerful but very good. Nice work.
XD

[Manpreet]

Nice write!

[Chris]

Very, very strong...

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

So few lines composed a powerful punch in a well written poem!

[Dylan S.]

My one suggestion is to use the parenthesis differently. Other than that, very nice.

[nathan]

Heh! Let me read this again

[Cassie Fraga]

wwwwhoooaaa... very intense!! nicely penned!!