Our light is shining ignorantly (Free verse)

Our light is shining ignorantly (Free verse)

A Poem by Mary Helda
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Sometimes even with love,certain friendships begin to fail

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You and i indulge in a love
So strong no death can violate
And yet
Dusk comes and goes
Along with pieces of our blissful bond

We fell into an abyss of friendship
And gradually got lost in it
Our promises are nolonger as intriguing as the promises of a courtesan
Conversations have become nothing but fleeting pleasantries...

Just like a sex addict drunk on viagra,i am desperate....
To ignite our dying flame

I can not lose you

© 2016 Mary Helda


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Mary Helda
thank you:-)

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startling direction this goes...yes, on that third stanza, and the hopes to reignite...after so many years the passion is limited and the two become more like friends rather than lovers...and the last line is telling..."i can not lose you"

and that is more in a physical, kinetic sense...we can be together still, but not really together.

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

You are definately right about that..thank you so much..i appreciate you dropping by:-)



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i love the ending specially !! it has a great powerful feelings that touches a readers heart
nicely written keep it up

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

thank you my dear:-)
zunie frost

8 Years Ago

welcome !!!
Such an emotional poem. I can definitely tell that this friendship turned to love, and that they didn't want to lose each other. They needed each other to love one another so they would never part and be alone. Very well written!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you dear friend:-)
startling direction this goes...yes, on that third stanza, and the hopes to reignite...after so many years the passion is limited and the two become more like friends rather than lovers...and the last line is telling..."i can not lose you"

and that is more in a physical, kinetic sense...we can be together still, but not really together.

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

You are definately right about that..thank you so much..i appreciate you dropping by:-)
Full of emotion. Love is sometimes bittersweet, like there's pleasure and pain at the same time.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

thank you dear friend
A poem drenched in fear and pain, Mary. It's finely written, emotionally flawless . Maybe writing will have helped a little, it can sometimes. Warmth and light flying your way.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

thank you Emmajpy..writing does help alot..its what enables me to feel better most times
Real emotion shown here, translated into a beautiful poem. I was just wondering, do you write from experience or do you project?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you..i usually write from experience...when i feel,i write...unless its about love...an intima.. read more
Very brilliant poem :) very powerful indeed

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

thank you josiah robb:-)
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I think it has an alternating character. From kind of nice in the first stanza, to troubled words in the second and strong, expressive words in the end.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

yes Mimim..it does..thanka for reviewing and reading:-)
Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

yes Mimi..it does..thanka for reviewing and reading:-)
Wow, such emotion in this piece. As friendships grow into much much more in one, but not the other...
or a love that simply doesn't last... and than the real sets in. A very moving verse, this ignited flame of superb writing.

bill

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you sir..i really do appreciate your kind words
I love this. I'm going through something quite similar. It's a painful ecstacy that I fear is drawing to a close... the most beautiful, delicious beast to ever have touched me will probably never love me and will likely tire of me altogether soon... it's a tragedy. This poem states how I feel. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and for your feedback...i am glad you could relate.. and i am sorry that you a.. read more
Jennifer Shaw

8 Years Ago

Yes! We will.

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Added on January 6, 2016
Last Updated on January 9, 2016
Tags: love, friendship, loss, letting go, hope

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Mary Helda
Mary Helda

Kampala, Christian, Uganda



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