Wavering love

To have a friend who can not proudly introduce you to his friends

His love blooms like a splendid
sun-kissed lily behind
closed doors....
Around friends-
it withers like the setting sun
settling into dusk.

Author's Note

Thank you:-)

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

A love that must be reviewed. Intimidated by friends or ashamed of his love. To different reasons, but I have not walked in his shoes. Well done.

A lover because he's comfortable with you behind closed doors, but fear overpowers in the real world. Very likely a man with empathy and a good heart. Or a jerk, who should get kicked to the curb real soon. hahaha

[Mary Helda]

hahahaha...definately the latter and he is going to be kicked to the curb real soo..still looking for the courage. .thank you sir.:-)

[Willard Wells]

Very little courage needed. I mean apparently he is not a man, treating you with no respect. Just ease on down the road and be busy a lot. :)

[Mary Helda]

I am doing exactly that..and each day goes by,i realize that the friendship is wrong despite loving him(best friend) so much... i am the one who is investimg in everything,always been there for him

[emmajoy]

Your emotions truly show in your quite brief poem, gently laid they are, however.

Not sure that you're wanting comments on your poem OR, advice as to how to deal with your ongoing relationship. Only you can know what kind of man you're with. Is he a lover, a friend or an opportunist!

As to your poetry, keep writing, give in to your feelings, use your gift.. eventually the emotions and the perfected words will melt hearts. Be sure of that, Mary.

[Mary Helda]

Thank you dear friend..i guess i wanted alittle bit of both..now i am sure about the right thing to do:-)...
thank you so,,,

[Nigel Newman]

Mary this is beautifully poetic. 'Like a splendid sun kissed lily behind closed doors'. Oh my! 'Like the setting sun settling into dusk' ... almost as nice, for me anyway. I'd have preferred 'sinking' (a) because it's less complimentary, and (b) because it avoids slight jarring with 'setting'. One of these days I will give unequivocal praise without 'suggestions'!!!

As others have said, this is NOT real love. Candlelit romance and 'just we 2' may have their place but show me how things are amongst the hurly burly in bright glaring daylight.

Best regards
Nigel

[Mary Helda]

Please dont stop giving me suggestions or criticising my work,i always love it when you do that..i learn from it and it motivates me ..its an honor to have you read my work..thank you:-)

[ANTO]

I imagine this is a complex man and he may feel that he cannot be his true self around his friends not vice versa - who is to say your are not seeing the real man and he puts this front on for his friends for whatever reason. But Its better to try at least to be the same. They say whichever way a man acts around his family will be the real him for they know him too well to be able to fool them. That would be the litmus test I feel.
And...
you could always ask him why.
Good imagery Mary Helda.

[Mary Helda]

Yes you are right but i guess it doesnt hurt so much because he is just my best friend..a best friend who only talks freely with me when we are alone or when we are texting,but with his friends around,he says we do not connect in public...so there is really nothing to ask him..i guess if it was my lover then i would ask him and do something about it...thank you for the advise and reviewing..i appreciate it

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A person who genuinely values you, will have enough courage to respect and accept you for who you are in front of the whole world. Anybody can pretend to be a Romeo behind closed doors but his pretence won't stand in the test of time.
Leave that rogue!

Well your words are emotive and well framed!
Loved the brevity!

[Mary Helda]

you are right dear poetess...thank you:-)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome, sweetie!

[V]

Interesting topic. Nicely written. I like the flower image.

[Mary Helda]

Thank you my friend:-)

[B. Boileau]

One wonders what goes through the mind of an actor of life.
excellent verse, well portrayed meaning.
bill

[Mary Helda]

Thank you sir:-)

[TheMalady]

Oh! this is so nice! Great play of words!

I like how it ends, it's so dramatic! Great poem! :)

[Mary Helda]

Thank you dear poetess:-)

[TheMalady]

You're very welcome! You're a dear poet as well. :)

[Mary Helda]

thank you:-)