Get to work Cupid

Get to work Cupid

A Poem by Mary Helda
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Cupid seems to be taking his time,if this doesnt wake him up then i dont know what will

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Alas! Cupid 
Slothefulness doesn't suit you 
Do something;will you? 
Pursue the universe 
To find my soulmate 
Lose yourself if you must 
Valentine's comes and goes as he pleases 
He is bored with my singleness 
What now Cupid? 
Your arrow must be bitter 
I'll write you a honeyed haiku 
I'll write you a sweet sonnet 
To replenish your magic 
Then you'll find love for me

© 2017 Mary Helda


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Mary Helda
Thank you:-)

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Poignant, sad and uplifting at the same time... You express yourself elegantly. Your terms are clear and your meanings crisp. You paint a picture with your words that is easily visible and easy to follow. You berate with one hand and reward with the other; like a slap followed by a kiss... Excellent form. The only thing you need to work on is your technical form. Example: Do something,will you? Correction: Do something; will you?
This is not a criticism, merely an observation.
All of us must live and grow or we would not be here. This is truly a heartfelt and beautiful work.
I look forward to reading more of your works. wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Ohh!!what a wonderful review...did put a smile on my face...thank you so much...I am going to edit t.. read more



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I believe in the power of positive thinking so keep those vibes flowing out into the universe and I'm quite certain cuspids arrow will find its way to your heart :) love this poem Mary

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

I hope so too...thank you so much Carolynn:-)
Cupid strikes whenever you least expect it, don't worry ;)
A nice, simple, short piece. I enjoyed it :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you my friend: -)
Haha! Lovely poem!
I feel the same way sometimes!
Keep it up!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you Emily:-)
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Mary Hi. I found this very engaging. It's a nice spin on looking for someone special. As per my habit, would you mind if I offered some observations for potential improvement ...
- you start by addressing Cupid as 'you' then switch to 'he' then back to 'you' (I'm assuming that Cupid is the one who is bored by the writer's singleness - who else?)
- I doubt it's laziness; more likely selectivity!!! And the writer doesn't like Cupid's selectivity
- I like the alliteration of honeyed haiku and sweet sonnet
- Valentines comes and goes .... this could be taken 2 ways .. you could mean Valentine's (apostrophe) Day comes and goes ... or you could mean that possible men come and go, i.e. pass by the writer rather than coming within reach (I read it this way first time because of the missing apostrophe)

Hope these observations help. You continue to be one of my 'go to' writers!
Regards
Nigel

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much..I do agree with your observation and I will definately make the changes..I apprec.. read more
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Gee
He'll strike,no doubt,when you least expect it.Nicely written

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you Gee..:-)
effective and witty.....hope it works

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you...I hope so too
Poignant, sad and uplifting at the same time... You express yourself elegantly. Your terms are clear and your meanings crisp. You paint a picture with your words that is easily visible and easy to follow. You berate with one hand and reward with the other; like a slap followed by a kiss... Excellent form. The only thing you need to work on is your technical form. Example: Do something,will you? Correction: Do something; will you?
This is not a criticism, merely an observation.
All of us must live and grow or we would not be here. This is truly a heartfelt and beautiful work.
I look forward to reading more of your works. wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Ohh!!what a wonderful review...did put a smile on my face...thank you so much...I am going to edit t.. read more
Seems like Cupid got his handsfull this year, a fun and lovely piece Miss Mary
I enjoyed it much, very cool, EG


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much
That's the way Mary, you tell him! But I bet there is someone waiting on the sidelines just longing for you to take notice of him!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Oh..thank you...well,if he is there then I really haven't noticed him like you said...but he is not .. read more
Great Aunt Astri

8 Years Ago

Give that Cupid a bit of a kick on the backside, and I am sure that someone will come out of the sid.. read more
Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

I will definitely do that then wait and see what he does
I can relate to your work, sounds like a cry for help and the disdain for loneliness. I bet cupid is now combing the earth trying to find you someone. Lovely piece

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

Thank you my dear
Jerryyoung1z

8 Years Ago

You're welcome

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