Damn you, I love you

this can be taken the wrong way. I love you Amy with all my being, remember 'My love is a whisper' and you cant take this the wrong way ( I hope).

DAMN YOU, I LOVE YOU

 

Damn you, I love you

I’m lying in bed

I can’t sleep

For you

Are on my mind

It hurts too much

 Because I don’t dream

Of anything

Or any one

I need you on my mind

Damn you, I love you

I’m sitting here

And writing to you

Instead of saying

What must be said

But I just can’t say

Those words

Those small words

With Amazing meaning

Damn you, I love you

Damn you, I’m sorry, but I love you

 

Reviews

[snapstache]

So cute,
But...to help the flow a bit, in the third line, I'd start a new line after sleep and make "For you" a line by itself...just a suggestion it helped me read it when I did it. Other than that...FANTASTIC! Now for the good :)
It was so cute and the emotion flows well its something we all feel at time so its a good topic. Awesome write.
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[Lilly]

A really lovely poem. So sweet.

[Sara]

I've had the same feeling, wonderful poem. Which I'm glad you decided to take the advice of the featured review, it's great anyways but that made it better.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Awe this was adorable. I loved the whole thing. I know it's hard to tell that to someone, but maybe you will have the strength to do that one day. Awesome job. I loved this. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Poetry Girl]

this is a sweet poem. its like you want to tell her you love her but you cant and it just makes you feel... damned haha. its really great. i think maybe if you put it in stanzas it might be better, but its still great the way it is. nice job

[Brandon]

i loved it thank you for requesting it

[Aggie Skeleton]

Thats sweet. Really sweet.

[Unbreakable]

love it!!! 8-)

[WriterSki7]

Heh. Most interesting; you should break it up into stanzas. You know, those annoying things usually three to six lines long? You have 21 lines so you can easily do stanzas of three. Good job though*

[Roxie Demonia]

thats so cute!!!

[zombiikillah666]

i love this. it is written well. good job. (: