Let's Make a Difference!!!

we must not tolerate anything that we feel is wrong... we must shun the so-called I dont care/bother attitude and with this thought in mind i wrote this poem...

Let's light a spark

Let's release a bird

Let's remove the darkness

Let's make a difference!

Let's leave a trail behind

Let's not follow the herd

Let's avail the opportunities immense

Let's make a difference!

 

Let's swim against the tide

Let's not be quiet

Let's not be intimidated by insolence

Let's make a difference!

Let's stand up again

Let's voice our concerns

Let's give up our forbearance

Let's make a difference!

Let's take a small step

Or make a giant leap

In which ever sense

Let's all make some difference!

Or we will have to pay for our indifference!!!  

Author's Note

we must not tolerate anything that we feel is wrong... we must shun the so-called 'I dont care/bother attitude'! With this thought in mind i wrote this poem... 'coz we must find the hidden courage in us to rise above the odds...

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear harman,

Wonderful sentiment. Even a small step in this direction makes a difference especially we we all make one together.

Nicely done.

Best regards,

Rick

[deeps]

This is so wonderful and yet so hopeful.
I really enjoyed this write. Very well written
and well expressed.

[The Perfectionist]

Okay, it's been a while since I've attacked that massive list of RRs you sent me.

These problems seem familiar. Immense, insolence, forbearance, and sense all rhyme with difference. Darkness doesn't. WHY do you do this to me? Be consistent. Rhyme all the time or none of the time or even half the time, not all but the first time!

Also, the 'immense' and 'insolence' lines are just too damn long.

I really like the idea you're ending this with, but given that you keep having rhymes in here, rhyming indifference with difference (which you do whether you wanted to or not) just sounds silly. I would suggest just taking all the damn rhymes out.

[MagiCrystal]

Lovely... I enjoy this! in this poem your voice is loud and original!
We are the future.. besides the present.! right!

[Ethan Paz]

I like how your writing strives for purpose. We all ought to be perfect and not be apathetic in life. A very profound writing you have written. Hope to read more of your writings.

[bluessadmood]

the thoughts here are so beautiful and far more..
lets make a difference or else we are not alive
lets stir things ,surly for the better,lets never be silent
at least voice your concern at whatever you see as wrong
its a real bad world we live in ,if we dont shout and cry
who else will do it for us,if not the good shining souls
would not haste to refine things then who will..
how i loved the thoughts here
lovely write..

[Princy]

*applause* this poem should be published as it has a proffessional touch. And a very crucial message.

[Nayan]

Such a joyous and full of hope poem!

[maryjaneuy]

this was really awesome! Because of this, everyone can realized that in our own little ways, we can make a big difference! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Small steps by many can change the world. A positive and hopeful poem. I believe we the people can create great change if we work together. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote