A TRIBUTE TO HER...

A TRIBUTE TO HER...

A Poem by harman kour
"

for all those who still dont know what a woman is...

"

StrongWoman.jpg strong woman image by dawnwoods

Some call her an elegant Gladula
Others call her a Daisy
Yet some say she's a sweet kitten
Her looks drive me crazy!!!

She's meek and frivolous
Far from being pragmatic
A dependent heart and mind
Has no reason and tactic!!!

You don't need her suggestions
It might lead you to disaster
Just show some love and sympathy
She'll perform her duties faster!!!

Oh Silly man!!!!
Your eyes are blindfolded
You are a rotten soul
Gates of your mind are bolted!!!

Look at her... Delve deep...
You'll find will and perseverance
Courage and Conviction
Her Selfless Love and Patience!!

She rises above all odds
Supports through thick and thin
She'll shed buckets of tears
Yet face you with a charming grin!!!

If you still don't get my words
Let her be a Mystery
Lead your life the way you want
Your foolishness is now History!!!

Because she's not a kitten
She's a valiant Lioness
Who catches the cunning prey
Doesn't mind your being the King, I guess!!!

She's a land unexplored
Her secret is clandestinely hidden
An inseparable part of this creation
She's but and only a Woman!!!  


 




© 2010 harman kour


Author's Note

harman kour
hmm... not much to say but i might edit it later... for now you check it out and do tell me your reviews... :))) And bdw the rhyme scheme is inspired by "Tate Morgan" and the rest is all original... :P

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Some of your rhymes are...stretched, to say the least, but at least they actually work.

The problems I found in your earthquake poem pop up again here, and so I'll just summarize.

It feels like you are using poetry as a shield; that just because you don't need full sentences means you can throw down anything you like, whether it makes sense or not. Which is not to say that it's gibberish, but just that it's very hard to take your narrator seriously when every other stanza makes me want to slap them for talking like that.

It's also worth pointing out that there are two parts to flow; rhyme and rhythm. Your rhyme is dodgy, but at least it's there. Don't forget about rhythm. You can't just make lines however long you want; it needs to fit with the rest of the stanza it's in.

Just remember, just because it's poetry and not prose doesn't mean you can do whatever you want. If anything, poems are more restrictive.

Posted 11 Years Ago


woman power ....olwz lvd d idea ...strong women! :)
nice write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Girl power !! haha :P Nice !!

Posted 11 Years Ago


i love it it reminds me of someone i know . . .

Posted 11 Years Ago


love it..........its pure n nice yet dangerour........wonderful read

Posted 11 Years Ago


this is a beautiful write, i love the way you describe a woman:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow, I really liked reading this!
I myself happen to find a woman to be most fascinating.
You do a good job at description and rhyme scheme in this poem.
:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love the way you described this woman in the poem. This piece of writing is descriptive and the flow is easy and effortless to follow.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Of course no woman would not love this poem... I'm not sure about the rhyme... some of the lines don't work together, and rhyme without perfect meter is very hard to pull off. Besides... do you really need to limit yourself with a form? Rhyming is nice, but your thoughts are the greater part of your poetry. Nice write. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Poem is very good. Description of a woman was outstanding. Take 50 years with a woman for a man know but a bit. Woman give man purpose and reason. A amazing poem. Your description was perfect.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago



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harman kour
harman kour

jammu, j&k, India



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its hard to describe me... i m a wave- calm n pleasing, a grain- worthless yet with a beauty of its own, i m silence i m depth... i m nothing yet something... more..

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