Maybe It’s been a Good Life After All

Playing around with these ideas ... putting them on *paper* to work through saying it the right way ... totally unfinished.

If I had to do it all again.  I wouldn’t.

                I mean I would want to,

                And I would Try.

But All that I could want to

                      Should be able,

                      Would Need to change

Most of those would be repeated

 

 

Those are what mattered.  Indispensable.

                A thousand times wanted

                Just once more again try

Corporal and spiritual totality, here and throughout

                                                 Born of trial and defeat

            Error and Blessing

In want of alteration, Desired eternal

 

 

So If I had to do it all again … I would

                Live the second equal to the first

                And so to the third, enjoy same

Since all that could be, has

                      Should be, became

                      Would be, created

Repeated same.  And if able, repeated again.

Author's Note

Like I said ... just messing around with the ideas trying to figure out the right words and organization

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your idea in this one...at times the awkwardness of some lines threw me a bit...and i know this is a work in progress...there is some excellent word play here...and some nice near rhyme..
i think leaving it awhile...then coming back to it...you'll finish it.
there are times i really want an idea to work but it persists on being stubborn..so i just leave it..
then later go back with a new perspective and "whalla"...there it is.

but this is "all that could be, " and will be created, when.

[Max64]

Thanks Jacob. Work has forced this one to the side for a bit ... I definitely intend to return to it later on as you suggest. Perhaps life has not yet led me to the point when the idea can be completed. Your comments are helpful and appreciated.

[Matching Socks]

Awww, this is so great Max. The idea of going back...
I wrote about it too.
I do love the way you've expressed yourself here though.
You've done it so well.