Lethal Dosage

just playing with the alphabets

Lost within

Somber rage,

Day  bloomed and died.

Reviews

[Karmee]

makes a point, enjoyed your words

[Nechelle]

I really enjoy the contrast between the brevity of this poem and vast depth it leads one to exploring.

Very nice

[Mayank]

Thank you Nechelle! I am glad you liked it.

[kyam]

Quick and to the point I would say....meaningful. Very deeply put also. Lots to think about and discover at your own leisure......Kyam

[Mayank]

Sure it is, thank you Kyam!

[Arunima]

U JUST TOOK ME TO ANOTHER WORLD....from the dreamy world that i live in....

[Riss Ryker]

Very short, but powerful and insightful. Everything dies at the end of life, no stopping it. No matter how much or how little we have, no matter how good or how evil, we all suffer the same fate at the end.

[Mayank]

Very true, this is the how our fate works. Did you notice and the light was seen after L.S.D. First alphabets in those 3 lines.

[Ghazal]

The light was seen because of DMT ...

[613]

This is a moody piece. It blends well with "Day bloomed" at the end, however. It adds a sense of light amidst darkness. As for the rest of the poem, the words you used were quiet descriptive & i got the full picture without you having to try too hard to show me.

Very good job!

- Brittney

[Mayank]

Thank you Brittney, I am glad you liked it :)

[613]

You're welcome!

[Gummy.G]

I have mixed emotions about this, I don't know if I should accept the fate that it is giving me, but I also want to see some light shown upon these dark words. You blend them well, a little bit of hope in that last one, "day bloomed.." but then as usual, "and died." Great job.

[Mayank]

It was an experience, psychedelic one. I am not sure how many connect with it.. but it's more like accepting that anything which alive today will die tomorrow.

[WanderAsia]

I truly admire anyone who can take me to another place with only 8 words. Well done!

[Mayank]

Thank you so much, I am happy those words can connect you!

[Elisa]

It takes a lot of talent to convey complex issues and imagery in so few words, but when someone can do it well, they hit it out of the park. That's exactly what you did here. Amazing job!

[Mayank]

Thank you so much, your review meant a lot for me :)

[Kamari's]

Very haunting I am actually looking for words to describe this I must say you have stumped me bravo.

[Mayank]

Thanks!!! I am glad you liked it...

[Kamari's]

Anytime :)