This has a perversely titillating effect, though the imagining may be somewhat brutal and bitter. The sexual connotations combined with the depiction of violent revenge and taunting a victim at mercy make the poem into a double-edged sword in a sense. In fact, the way the scene is played out is rather like 'paying back in kind'... "JUST BEND OVER
That's all you CAN do"
...Puts the 'victim' in the assumed sexual position of the w***e. Divine retribution is what comes to mind, and through this the meat of the words and message is set alight. The fierceness of the language is alive with feeling, and conveys a sense of power and humour that echoes through the first-person perspective of the writing; and the characters involved in this nasty little scene are easy to imagine as a result.
"Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about"
The above lines are stand-out; pithy, bitchy, harsh, and funny. They typify the entertaining and involving nature of this work. The last verse is a forceful and satisfying conclusion which reflects the whole feeling of the poem. The words, like the actions, are like a summary execution. A character assassination. I think we all know people like this, and indeed many may well have been in or imagined being in a situation like this, it is universal. Really enjoyable.
this should be rated mature!!!! xD um, very brutal, though I have to say, you have a very visual style of poetry here, and you are very good at portraying your imagery.
Not a lot of length, that can dissect the base connotation of the depravity, or depths sunk to. In a depreciating of conditions usery.
Blunt and straitforward. The new urban venacular of sexual extremes is presented and paints, a venonous picture. Fulfills the obvious slanderous intention, in this vengeful accusation.
lol, hard to intellectually match Devons deal...
[meaning no offence, of course, Dev old boy]
I used a lot of fancy terminology, to say... wow, f****n brutal.
Smokin hot & unique.
You have an excellent control over the wrath in your spirit. The words used are meant to harm but they are used recklessly. That's a difficult skill to maintain. Good read.