Wonder Why We Call You W***e

Wonder Why We Call You W***e

A Poem by KatiePie

Cry all you please you f*****g tease
Get on your knees and use your mouth
Taste what hate's about

 

Please do
Bend over b***h

 

Open your mouth
And use those lips
For something other than
Talking s**t

 

Skank this ain't heart break yet

 

Your fucked up from the head down
Your next scream won't be a love sound

 

You'll see through gouged out eyes
I'll laugh as your soul cries

 

You pray he doesn't fall in love with me

I never wanted him

So b***h, please

 

Just bend over
That's all you can do

 

The only time your pretty
Is when you're broken in two.

 

You picked the wrong time to drop your heart
B***h this pain is just the start

 

Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about

 

You wonder why they call you w***e
But we all know
It's cause your nothing more
Than the f**k buddy next door

© 2014 KatiePie


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This has a perversely titillating effect, though the imagining may be somewhat brutal and bitter. The sexual connotations combined with the depiction of violent revenge and taunting a victim at mercy make the poem into a double-edged sword in a sense. In fact, the way the scene is played out is rather like 'paying back in kind'... "JUST BEND OVER
That's all you CAN do"
...Puts the 'victim' in the assumed sexual position of the w***e. Divine retribution is what comes to mind, and through this the meat of the words and message is set alight. The fierceness of the language is alive with feeling, and conveys a sense of power and humour that echoes through the first-person perspective of the writing; and the characters involved in this nasty little scene are easy to imagine as a result.
"Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about"
The above lines are stand-out; pithy, bitchy, harsh, and funny. They typify the entertaining and involving nature of this work. The last verse is a forceful and satisfying conclusion which reflects the whole feeling of the poem. The words, like the actions, are like a summary execution. A character assassination. I think we all know people like this, and indeed many may well have been in or imagined being in a situation like this, it is universal. Really enjoyable.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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"JUST BEND OVER
That's all you CAN do" I loved this phrase. It's harsh and messed up, but very well written.



Posted 13 Years Ago


Unrelenting in its threat.

I am not quite sure what is being threatened. So far, the subject seems to be winning since SHE is the 'girlfriend.'

Question: is this a fierce snarl of the predator or the whimper of the lesser carnivore chased from it kill by one bigger, stronger, more capable?

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this should be rated mature!!!! xD um, very brutal, though I have to say, you have a very visual style of poetry here, and you are very good at portraying your imagery.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Not a lot of length, that can dissect the base connotation of the depravity, or depths sunk to. In a depreciating of conditions usery.
Blunt and straitforward. The new urban venacular of sexual extremes is presented and paints, a venonous picture. Fulfills the obvious slanderous intention, in this vengeful accusation.
lol, hard to intellectually match Devons deal...
[meaning no offence, of course, Dev old boy]
I used a lot of fancy terminology, to say... wow, f****n brutal.
Smokin hot & unique.

Posted 13 Years Ago


You have an excellent control over the wrath in your spirit. The words used are meant to harm but they are used recklessly. That's a difficult skill to maintain. Good read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh jeez. I have a "friend" that this describes perfectly!

Posted 13 Years Ago


intense projections
lethal language
i wouldn't want to be involved in this gossip
but its entertaining to read

Posted 13 Years Ago


I wouldn't want to be on your bad side.....smiles
Great poem love the rhyme.

Thanks for sharing a rant

Kelley

Posted 13 Years Ago


ive never heard somethig more hatefully wonderful. great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

perfect end rhyme

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: Wonder, Why, We, Call, You, Whore, Dark, Poetry

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