If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

A Poem by KatiePie

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

© 2010 KatiePie


Author's Note

KatiePie
Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

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I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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Hmm I love it! It shows how girls are so much better than guys!lol

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lol "F*****g" and "Fucken" to me are the same word, just differant spellings, maybe thats why? Any ways, back on topic, I enjoyed reading this, and while I normally dont read too many pieces with this kind of language, or write them for that matter, I REALLY enjoyed reading this piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


great write. I like how you pull me in to hit me with the final phrase. Brilliantly done.

With Love,

Jaidyn

Posted 10 Years Ago


I actually really like this piece, its very sadistic, and i love how it gives just a little insight into a sadistic mind, it also makes you wonder what the woman did to cause the man to react this way, or if she did anything at all.

Posted 10 Years Ago


idk why but I'm lolling while reading this...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great write! To me there is a difference.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You're such a sweet little sadist :P

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was just horrible. The way she treated this poor guy was unbelievable.
There must be some darkness inside of all of us, because we all seem to be
cheering on the villain. Great poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was funny to me but I know where your coming from in it.
Great write.......smiles

Posted 10 Years Ago


I just love this poem....i add this poem as one of my favourates...whole poem is great...good work:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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