If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

A Poem by KatiePie

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

© 2010 KatiePie


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KatiePie
Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

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I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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I liked it! It was magnificent! I was laughing at every turn and it speaks to my darker side. Fantastic. Simply fantastic. I shall remember this
Rain


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hahahaha I love this.
Actually no, I'm in love with this. It's amazing. I love how it's so blunt. And just straight to the point. Excellent job. :).

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OH I LOVE THIS YOU KNOW I HAD DREAMS LIKE THAT! I LOVE IT WONDERFUL, FANTASTIC, BEAUTIFUL AMAZING! Okay want my serious just as loving opinion?

This is sarcastic and my kind of writing this is something people should read you could get a strong idea from it you did a nice job with presentation so please allow me to add the closing...
I've been f*****g screwed by the world as I'm sure everyone has, but nice job!
(I hate cussing and I shouldn't it just goes with the moment) Nice job I'm adding this to my favorites!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

The two are both words just one is a slang venacular of Irish

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed the first poem I read so much I had to read another. I was not disappointed. =) For what it's worth, I say any word goes even if it is not in the dictionary. After all if Shakespeare can create words in his poetry that become widely used, why can't we?

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this write especially the first lines.
This is awesome!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You could still use the word Fucken, its dialect and makes it more yours. People make up words for their poems all the time. I really enjoyed this. I loved the anger and craziness of it. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Kes
You know, i've only got 2 poems in my favourites and this is one of them. And that means i must like it a LOT. lol Mate, this is amazing. Right up my street. Yeah, i've said that before... I've read just about all of your poetry because of this one poem. Ok, that sounded a bit stalker-ish... lol

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

The slang for f*****g is f****n'... just like walking is walkin' and talking is talkin'... Hopefully that helps :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

these are some powerful lines....

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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