If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

A Poem by KatiePie

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

© 2010 KatiePie


Author's Note

KatiePie
Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

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I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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This completely stunned me. The first stanza got me thinking straight away what kind of person you are. And what you would be like in a relationship. I admire the dark side of yourself what you have expressed in the poem. It shows the reader your identity and what kind of person you. I guess for someone to like you they would have to be truly understanding person. And not question life so much.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shouldn't it be 'you're' - not to be pedantic 'cos i cudnt care less bout tings of dat nature. but some people get all facety about semantics.

really enjoyed this piece, the bold worked well as line shout outs.



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I adore this piece I really do! It is amazing and I can't wait to read it over and over again

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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wow! That title is in your face! Brilliant. seductive but sinister...what a mix..well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A nice sound to a description of a fucked up love!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The use of obscenities spoils you poem. I'm not a prude but there are many better words you could have chosen.overused words like f*****g lose there shock value

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ok I COMPLETLY agree with Shannon! I LOVE this. It's actually the way I feel and something I'm going through! This really spoke to me, thank you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Okay I wrote a HUGE long review and it only posted like one line...>.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is REALLY good to, you are probably one of my very favorite poets ever.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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