Will he. Won't he. (seeking feedback!)

this i my first try at writing a poem and would like some constructive feedback on the piece.

Will he. Won’t he,

In a sea of people,

Waiting. Just waiting.

 

Will he. Won’t he,

Sitting all alone,

No one to hear, nowhere to turn,

Waiting. Just waiting,

 

Will he. Won’t he,

Waiting for the call,

for the moment,

for the answer.

 

Will he. Won’t he,

Waiting on him,

All moves gone, all pieces played.

 

Will he. Won’t he,

Can he see the light, or just the abyss,

Can he feel the love,

Does he know the love.

 

Will he. Won’t he,

Can he make up his mind,

Can he stop this torture,

This will he, won't he, maybe now, maybe later.

 

Will he. Won’t he,

Swallow that pill,

Pull that trigger,

Take that step.

 

The waiting is murder,

The waiting is consuming,

Every thought,

Will he. Won’t he. Maybe now. Maybe later.

 

Ring Ring Ring Ring,

Heart stops,

Will he. Won’t he,

Ring Ring Ring Ring.

 

The pill, The gun, The ledge,

What will it be, How will it end,

Ring Ring, Ring Ring

Will he? Won’t he?

Author's Note

give me all critiques you have