Silent Warnings

Silent Warnings

A Poem by Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

So worn,

I can’t get passed it.

So torn,

But I try to mask it.

Each move,

Could hurt forever,

With a pain,

That’s a greater measure,

Than all I’ve known before.


My soul,

In an early casket.

My life,

In a wicker basket.

Can’t move,

Cause I am fettered.

Like a slave,

I’m bound and tethered.

And I can’t take much more.


But no…


Don’t go.

I can’t let go.


I’m praying,

For a world that stays the same,

For a time that doesn’t change.


So no…


You know,

I can’t let go.


I’m living,

In my head, where I’m secure,

In a past I know for sure.


Confined,

In a lonely bracket.

No choice,

On a lonely ratchet.

My world,

Is about to sever.

I fight to keep,

It all together.

The way it was before.


I hear,

The silent rackets.

Alarms,

Like broken gaskets.

I’m told,

That change is better.

I don’t believe them,

Whatsoever.

I can’t take this anymore.


But no…


Don’t go.

I can’t let go.


I’m praying,

For a world that stays the same,

For a time that doesn’t change.


So no…


You know,

I can’t let go.


I’m living,

In my head, where I’m secure,

In a past I know for sure.

© 2016 Michael (Letters and Lifelines)


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Both the broken format and repetition seem to enhance this poem. They seem to help to get across the desperation. I am sure many will identify with this thoughtful poem. Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend!
Well written and expressed!
Many have a hard time with change,
I can relate to an extent, really enjoyed reading this piece:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading an reviewing, my friend! I'm sorry for the late reply!
I relate to this so much, I hate change, and would most certainly rather be alive alone with my own mind than in the presence of someone else. I love this, a great write :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you can relate! I'm sorry for the late reply!
With most things I also would like to keep a systematic approach, this portrayed how I felt exactly! Your writing is always like a breath of fresh air my friend

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Lotus Flower! I'm sorry for the late reply!
Very powerful words that were configured into a beautiful poem. Made me think of how I also want the world just to stay the same and have the past to grasp onto forever.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lauren!
Lauren_The_Awesome

7 Years Ago

Your very welcome!
A emotional ride in your words.
"I’m praying,
For a world that stays the same,
For a time that doesn’t change."
Life can be scary. We must go forward and be fearless. Thank you for sharing the powerful poetry. You left a lot for the reader to think about.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you as always, Coyote, for stopping by and reading and for your nice reviews.
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Such feels! I think we all want to hang on to some part of our past and have conflicts with what is going on inside of our heads. Such great and raw writing. Thank you for sharing : )

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and for the great review, Ashley!
this is a great poem! i even like how it looks visually. although this could be read metaphorically to fit many situations, i can't help but read it literally. i feel like the narrator really could be in pain for the rest of his mortal life if he moves , and that imagery makes me think of a hospital bed (in a bracket) with a "wicker basket" full of meaningful mementos of his life, like photos and stuff.

the verse in the middle is appealing to look at and read in the sense that it seems like the narrator is centering himself with these thoughts. it's really interesting to read "i'm praying for a world that stays the same" because there's nothing at all in the world that we can point to and say "that'll never change." we just don't get that as humans, everything in the world changes, and i think that's a huge issue many people struggle with. i find it interesting here because the narrator says "pray" and usually the thing people pray to is the solution to living in a world of impermanence (meaning god is usually viewed as eternal, whereas nothing else is). so, to manage life the narrator is grasping at memories "in my head" and "in the past" because they feel like the only permanent things in the world, which again makes me think there's photos next to him too.

i really like this poem. it speaks to me in a pretty real and human way. good job!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you for the amazing review, my friend! I love your insights and your take on my writing! .. read more
I like the concept around which this is built, that time in the past one clings to and wishes could last forever. The repeated chorus being centered is interesting in that it's different and moves the eye around—which is great—but a couple notes on the format—is there a deeper meaning behind the unusual spacing? I'd like to know the significance behind it. Also was comic sans a purposeful choice? Personally, I found it distracting. I'd like to know your reasoning behind these formatting choices. :) I enjoyed the first two stanzas the most. I found the visual of the basket/casket especially powerful.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the amazing review, Clara! The spacing was put in place to emphasize the rhythm of the.. read more
It is hard to expect change, especially when you believe it will affect you negatively. This poem radiates with the desire to cling onto the present, and constant fear of change. Sometimes we don't want to move on, because where we are now feels too nice. A great poem Michael, great to see you back at it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael (Letters and Lifelines)

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Amber! Thank you for all your kind words and insights into my writing!

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