this is not

this is not poetry:

your smile is like prison-rape beneath a crystalline waterfall.

call me at 3am,

so we can threaten one another with suicide

and share intimate hot breaths.

you’d look sexy covered in my O-negative,

holding the sharp metal solution to my problem.

 

this is not poetry:

you are not a beautiful woman.

I am not a sleazy sailor.

we’re all just dirty thoughts

in the spin cycle.

 

we won’t come clean.

we're more stains than fabric.

Reviews

[EMF]

Ah....this is the bit where people offer advice and concern. So....

A perfect omlette is made with three eggs, whisked to fully airate them. A little milk can be used, but no more than a tablespoon. Half a teaspoon of oil added to the mix negates the need to oil the pan. The pan MUST be hot, so that when the mix is added there is no chance for the oil/egg mix to seperate. Once into the pan don't try to flip the ommlette. Rather mix from the outside to the in. Once the mix is firm to your taste, plate up and serve.

There. Advice.

The poem? Bloody good write.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, I really can't tell if it was your intention for the reader to have an erotic reaction to the prose, or the non poetry as you put it, but I did and i thank you for it, well done, good read! x

[An owl on the moon]

Your words truly pound powerfully into the mind... letters like fists driving in the thoughts of lusty screams and fierce flights of fancy. Everything changes as one falls down, line by line.

[Mockingbird]

love the imagery. in a sick twisted way, i like it a lot. it's gritty and raw and primal. a breath of fresh air around here. by the way, what the hell is that? julia childs? should we put paprika in there too?

[Nobody.]

"we're more stains than fabric."
like that. interesting read.

[Kerry O'Connor]

call me at 3am,
so we can threaten one another with suicide
and share intimate hot breaths...

What does it say about me that this made me smile :)

[OT]

ahh you're back!!! haha so good to read real poetry on here after sifting through... yeah

love - "you’d look sexy covered in my O-negative," - and "so we can threaten one another with suicide" lol!? what a thought! "this is not poetry" - it is what it is - metaphors can't make everything pretty! nice job!