Frayed

This is solid writing -- much better than I could do when I was a kid. And it's an interesting story too. If you keep writing it, I'll definitely keep reading.

One thing that might make it better is telling us more about what kind of person Ella is. What makes her unique? What are her likes and dislikes, what life-changing experiences has she had, did she grow up under unusual circumstances, etc. Going out of your way to define these things and communicate them to us will make her seem more like a real person and may even help to drive the story.

If you want advice, the best I have for a young writer is to keep writing, and keep reading, as much as you can. If you do that, you'll improve naturally.

Posted 11 Years Ago

This is solid writing -- much better than I could do when I was a kid. And it's an interesting story too. If you keep writing it, I'll definitely keep reading.

One thing that might make it better is telling us more about what kind of person Ella is. What makes her unique? What are her likes and dislikes, what life-changing experiences has she had, did she grow up under unusual circumstances, etc. Going out of your way to define these things and communicate them to us will make her seem more like a real person and may even help to drive the story.

If you want advice, the best I have for a young writer is to keep writing, and keep reading, as much as you can. If you do that, you'll improve naturally.

Posted 11 Years Ago