The black mist-like creature

The black mist-like creature

A Story by Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

True story


     I have always been open to believing in ghosts. I remember as a child, I often thought I saw a glimpse of some here and there. Of course, that notion is quickly whipped out of you as you grow up and realize that you aren’t supposed to talk of such things. You aren’t supposed to talk about a lot of things that seem very real to you as a child.

     I come from a very intuitive family and so I naturally had the ability to do and see some things that not all children could. Now, I know that it was normal for my family, but when I was younger, nobody talked of such things. For instance, I didn’t know that not all people could see the shadow-like lights that were around every living thing and a lot of nonliving things. I thought that everyone could see that. It wasn’t until later on in my childhood that I realized I was weird.

     Not to mention the fact that I saw things before they happened. Scary!! That is not a gift-curse that I would wish on any child. I thought that I was evil (spawn of the devil himself). It was hard to distinguish if I saw things before they happened or if I created things in my mind to happen.

     I remember one incident vividly. I was playing dodge ball in gym class in about 4th or 5th grade. I saw (I’ll call her Suzie) get hit right in the face with the ball. I saw it in my mind. I did not like “Suzie” very much. She was very mean to me. A lot of people were, but she was an instigator if you know what I mean. So when Suzie got hit in the face with the ball for real, I felt really weird (almost like I was guilty) and I didn’t throw the ball.

      Well, I since have made peace with my gift-curse after a very long and bumpy road of self-doubt and partial insanity. The long road led me from a confusing darkness where I turned away from anything spiritual at all, to an enlightening, anything goes, free-for-all existence. Luckily, I found my way back down to reality. On that road, I have seen some interesting things.

     The scariest thing that I ever saw as an adult was in an old duplex that I used to live in. My oldest son was six and my daughter was just a baby. It was about 10:30 in the morning and my husband was at work and my son was at school. I was on the couch napping off and on while my daughter napped in a playpen beside me. All of a sudden, I felt a bad energy come through the door. I saw a black mist-like creature on the ceiling and it saw me too. Now, I shouldn’t tell you this because if I do, you will blow this off as a dream, but here it goes….

      I never really opened my eyes. I was on the couch but I was no longer on the couch. I had instantly risen up out of my body at full attention ready for battle. That was how evil this thing felt. It was not some ordinary ghost. I quickly closed my thoughts as to not give any hint of weakness. This all happened without me really understanding how. It just did. I sent a message to it that I was not scared of it, I was not scared of anything and it was to leave this house immediately. I again had to guard my thoughts so as to not reveal the only thing that I was truly scared of (my children getting hurt).

     It flew across the room and down the hall. I followed it. Well, I was still on the couch but my awareness followed it all the way down the hall and it turned into my son’s room. It was then that I realized that I was not in my body. I think the guilt I felt for blowing off my sons complaint of the evil face that he always saw in his room brought me back. I quickly snapped back and then jumped off of the couch and ran into my son’s room. Of course I found nothing but an eerie feeling.

     Now, I know that some of you reading this will just think that this was all a dream. It did not feel like a dream to me. I have had some very real dreams and visions don’t get me wrong. Never had I snapped back into my body before jumping up and running down a hall. That was down right scary. One thing that came from all this was that I didn’t give my son a hard time when he didn’t want to sleep in his room. I am much more open with my children about their abilities. I hope that more people will take their children serious after reading this.




© 2008 Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

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I remember you now.

Just kidding.

Interesting piece. The apparition sounded pretty scary. I often get the impression that little children and animals see things we often don't (or refuse to). There is a reason our stories from the past are filled with ghosts and goblins and things in the night. Maybe they are real after all, but choose not to be seen. Good write.

Posted 13 Years Ago

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That's a really cool story. In Christian literature, "astral projection" is listed as one of Gabriel's powers. I don't see any reason why this is impossible.

"Well, I since have made peace with my gift-curse after a very long and bumpy road of self-doubt and partial insanity." Gifts are meant to be put to use - some of them are kind of disturbing, but you can live with them.


Posted 13 Years Ago

3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Very intriguing and chilling! This is something I definitely would NOT take lightly; it's obvious that you have some connection with the paranormal and it should be investigated to understand fully what spirits you are dealing with. So out of the blue this piece is!

Posted 13 Years Ago

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This is a fascinating account of premonitory events and happenstances in your life. I don't know if you were aware of the term Autoscopic phenomena; it is defined as an experience in which a person, while believing to be awake, sees her or his body and the world from a location outside their physical body. Autoscopies have mystified humanity since records began and are abundant in the folklore, mythology, and spiritual story telling of both ancient and modern societies.

It reminded me of Carl Sandburg's biography of Abraham Lincoln. He recounted a strange dream that had haunted Lincoln throughout one winter. On the evening of his election he laid down on a haircloth sofa, just after the first telegrams of November 6 had told him he was elected President and, looking into a bureau mirror across the room, he saw himself full length, but with two faces. It bothered him and he got up, but the illusion vanished and when he lay down again, there in the glass were two faces, one paler than the other. However, taken up in the excitement of this election, Lincoln forgot all about it. His wife worried about it too when a few days later he tried it once more and the illusion of the two faces again registered to his eyes. But that was the last time; the ghost didn't come back and when he told his wife, she had a premonition it was a sign he would be elected to a second term, and that the death pallor of one face meant he wouldn't live through his second term.

There are many strange and wondrous stories out there waiting to be told, thank you for sharing yours.

God's Blessing

Posted 13 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Definitely sounds like a spiritual encounter....

The darkside is something to be taken very seriously ...Childrn can see more ...

I'd be rebuking that .....a whole lotta prayer n' fasting

The way it is written is fine...of course...but I think if you went deeper into describing...sensations...feelings surroundings ...etc it would be even more powerful


Posted 13 Years Ago

3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I agree with George. He said it very well!! Good Job!

Posted 13 Years Ago

3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Interesting piece. Great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago

3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Very metaphysical. I know of tales along this line, the energy auras and bad karma auras. Maybe we are too caught up in the world we do not allow our minds the time to see things like this? I think people have different abilities to see and sense things. It flies in the face of our modern culture, but that's just life. Well written and very well expressed work. Great ghost story. Stephen King could not have done better, scarier yes, but not better!

Posted 13 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Interesting! I have seen many things as a child but now I refuse to allow the dark stuff to get to me...I simply rebuke them in God's name...but it IS a scary thing! Nice story :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great experience. I believe people have some ability or gift that others don't - even if most people would label you crazy. I just got the ability after my grandmother's death of sensing when someone is going to die. I thought it was just my grandmother but it was confirmed when I was able to sense a few others deaths and was right every time. So yay me.

You are very brave to share this story with us. Kudos to you.
Great Write.

Posted 13 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

That was some experience you had. I have in the past seen many things that others don't believe, but you yourself know if it's true or not. Children are more open to seeing things that adults don't, they don't undertsand so they tell of their sightings freely.
Hope you don't experience it again..

Posted 13 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks
Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

Fort Wayne, IN

I have been writing since I knew how. Before that I would just draw pictures to tell a story. My true passion is poetic lyrics. That is mostly what I am inspired to write. I have been dabbling in othe.. more..


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