Hide and Seek

Hide and Seek

A Poem by Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

There's a mask that I wear

when I don't want to share.

All my feeings inside,

with the mask I can hide,

so nobody will know

what I don't want to show

and so I won't reveal

the true feelings I feel.

 

Hide and seek,

that's the game we play.

Want to find ourselves

so we hide away.

Safe from yourself,

you play peek-a-boo,

'till you see yourself

as the real you.

 

 

The surface that I show

is not the me I know.

It's just my reflection,

only my protection.

You can look at my skin

but you cannot see within.

This body is a role

that I play with my soul.

 

M.J.S.

2000

© 2008 Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks


Author's Note

Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks
This is a song. The hide and seek part is the chorus. When I performed this I used props such as a mask and a mirror. I also sang with different voices as to represent the different masks I was wearing. The black and white words do not do this piece justice at all.
Love All, Mejasha

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I love it the idea is brilliant..the metaphor of the child game hide and seek is great..we all wear mask..i love the poem "We Wear The Mask" its one of my favorites..this song reminds me of it alot..i've never written a song before so thats not my expertise but i would have to say that this is a hit..hahaha..all you have to do is find the write voice to portray your beautiful story that you have laid out here..it is a sad relatization that we try to hide our true selfs from ourselfs..we hide it so much from others that we begin to believe that we are the face of the mask that we wear..i love the format of this poem and you already know i love all of your rhyming work..i honestly enjoyed it..great write..
Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

s~Shanty~s



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

We all wear some sort of mask to hide our true self from the world.
In a perfect world we would all shed our masks and live in harmony and truth, but alas..
A grate song with a great concept - imprinting the game within ourselves.
Great rhyming as well.

YF

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought it was great! :) every one has their secrets and their masks. And your right we play peekaboo till we come to grips with who we are!
Great concept!
Clap clap clap! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How very true this is, Mejasha....for many. All of us can get use to stuffing our feelings and pretending. When we start that, we have just picked up a mask. Kind of a scary place to be because those feelings that we stuff will make their way out in one way or another, and it's not always pleasant when they come to the surface. Especially when it comes to anger and frustration...Good job. Again, very catchy write...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is so close to truth. great writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this...hiding is what we all do well...

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Well written. I like your analogies here. To me, the scariest part of a life is seeing it in review. I am often mindful of how I will feel seeing my actions in review; from another's perspective. The hardest challenge and the greates enlightenment we have is to face ourselves and not turn away from the reflections we find staring back at us..from laugh lines to worry lines the story of a life is woven in the creases of the face. And yet we pay thousands to erase them! Some get so lost in the "Games we Play" that they forget who they are. How sad. Such is the way of fear, the law of gravity..don't let it weigh you down..it's hard to soar with the eagles when you're hanging out with turkeys...Be Of Good Cheer

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this, and i can see how this would be performed in song. Really I think offsetting each stanza helps to suggest it is a different character (mask) speaking, as well as changing the rhyme scheme in the middle. All in all very cool.

We all wear masks, the trick is knowing when to take them off
Thanks

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks
Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

Fort Wayne, IN



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I have been writing since I knew how. Before that I would just draw pictures to tell a story. My true passion is poetic lyrics. That is mostly what I am inspired to write. I have been dabbling in othe.. more..

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