Irish Green

Irish Green

A Poem by Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

With some Irish Spring, I lather well.

Green Apple shampoo, I love the smell.

Whistle clean now, I hang my green rag.

I wear my lime shirt and jeans with green tag.

In my hunter green truck I drive off to work.

Irish cream in my coffee, for a nice perk.

Her emerald eyes greet me at the door.

She says to me, "Why all the green for?"

I try to think of something Irish to say.

Then she says, "St. Patrick's was yesterday."

 

© 2008 Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks


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Instead of "Why all the green for?" I'd suggest "What's all the green for?" I think it still flows with your poem - and it makes more sense. Did you mean to type "what's"?

Charming and very funny - You should try making some of these into e-cards, if you want to. I think you might even be able to sell them and promote your work. (some people are insulted when I suggest this, no idea why, but please don't be mad)

Thanks for sharing, it made me smile :D

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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You made me laugh after a tough day! Excellent funny twist at the end. I love how consistent all your work is. Well done.
-JK

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Happy Saint Patrick's Day to you. This is such a cute (hmm, never called a peice of writing cute before.) peice. I love the little peice of humor at the end. Great. Actually, funny thing is, I forgot today was St. Patrick's Day and didn't realize until it was too late to go home and change. *sigh* Oh well, love this peice. Good job dear.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the humor at the end. Humor makes life so worth living. I love this piece. Beautifully penned. Great job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How refreshingly beautiful! Awesome ending here that made me smile. It seemed like a case of forgetfulness here. Although, around the globe when people get drinking, they won't know what day it is later. haha. Very entertaining. Happy St. Patrick's Day!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was cool! I liked the rhyme and all the green. To bad it was a day late! :)
Great poem!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really got the irish vibe off of this one.
Imagined a leprechaun reading it to me.
I'd consider changing the color of the 3rd+4th lines - definitely irish, but too bright for me eyes :)
Great rhyming, mood and what not.
Happy St. Patrick's day!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved it! Loved the playfulness and the all the subtle shades of green. Love the twist at the end! It definitely did not suck!!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cute! Perfect for St. Patrick's Day! Even though there was obviously a year when you missed it by a day. :-(
Kudos anyway. :-)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You spelled coffee wrong. XD

Other than not, it was a good write. Are you Irish?

Love the perfect combination of words related to St. Patrick's Day. XD

Thanks for sharing!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! A clean peice. Nice work. I doubt that I know much about St. Patrick's day. So I cannot say anything more than this is very nice work by you. ~KA~

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks
Melanie Jane Boicourt Shanks

Fort Wayne, IN



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I have been writing since I knew how. Before that I would just draw pictures to tell a story. My true passion is poetic lyrics. That is mostly what I am inspired to write. I have been dabbling in othe.. more..

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