Waves

Poem about a married man revealing money problems to his extravagant wife.

He'd lost his job
'Bout a year ago
Still had a tough time
Telling her No.

She was extravagant
Wanted finer things
Furs, fancy cars
Baubles and rings.

When he found the tickets
His anger did rise
But she fluttered her lashes
Atop sad puppy dog eyes.

Off to the bank
To withdraw the funds
His worried face fell
He knew there was none.

Returning to his wife
He had to reveal
Their financial status
Was virtually nil.

She ranted and raved
And threatened to leave
Set her drink down
And began to weave.

He knew it was time
To up and leave her be
He'd be better off alone
Maybe somewhere on the sea?

As he sat on the beach
Drinking whiskey by the quart
He smiled into the waves
Loving the last resort.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

Very nicely done Melissa. Great pace to this piece and not only a fine tale but a warning to us all to start living within our means. We all want the best of things sometimes, but remember before credit cards the way you used to do it, by saving up and feeling the excitement growing as you got nearer to your target. It's all instant gratification now and it's not nearly as appreciated as before, in the long, long ago, in the far, far away. Ah, bah humbug..Kids today :)

[MelissaAndres]

Oh yes! Back in the day I got my own self into trouble with credit cards. Not a very pretty picture, my friend! Today, after some hard lessons learned, I try to pay cash for everything and just leave the credit cards for major, major emergencies. Much better plan!

[Autumn Lyric]

very quaint tale delivered in excellent flow and grace.. and a sad tale as well, as money woes seem to be dividing factor in the marriages of today. it is a rare and beautiful thing to see marriages that are intact and holding fast to one another, rather than to what they have accumulated. such placing of value on "things" truly fades away in "waves"; true love stands forever in loss as well as in gain...
another excellent write!

[ANTO]

This is cool Melissa. A woman of substance his wife is not - more of a Hyancinth Bouquet and he is the patsy. I like how you finished this without a sad ending - I'd like to think that he saw an answer in the water which didnt involve him going in. Nicely done.

[Tom]

' Good riddance, I say, marry for love and not for money' ! ( probably why I'm broke but at least I'm happy) lol

Great poem, rhyme, flow and a moral story to savour !

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Tom! I've never met anyone that had enough money just to marry them for their money! Haha! But, I figure that wouldn't be a very good relationship anyway -- at least not a lasting one! Glad you enjoyed it.

[wordman]

a great story melissa,and i`m sure it`s true for a lot of people

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, wordman! I'm sure it probably is too.

[wordman]

my pleasure !

[annalysiar]

Quite nice. Soft and true

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you for reading, annalysiar!

[Coyote Poetry]

I have done this 20 years ago dear Poet.
"As he sat on the beach
Drinking whiskey by the quart
He smiled into the waves
Loving the last resort. "
The sea is a good place to find mind. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Coyote Poetry! I am a mountain girl myself (just my preference) but anywhere we can find peace of mind and get ourselves together is a wonderful thing! Glad you liked this.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Blue]

I love the cadence and the rhyme of this poem. The story unfolds just at the right pace. I was watching Desperate Housewives season 1 and the girl in this poem reminds me of Gabby, a materialistic housewife. Keep up the good work!

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Blue! I am glad you enjoyed this. I have never actually watched Desperate Housewives myself but I can only imagine! Haha!

[Samuel Dickens]

I think I knew that guy, I knew people like him, at least. Plenty people can blow their finances all on their own, but he had a lot of help. It's a terrible thing to deny the laws of math.

[MelissaAndres]

Oh yes ... I've never been very good at math but I don't have to count very high with the little money we have! Hahaha! :)