Dogma

Hmm...

08/13/12

The wet snap

Made it to my inner ear

From the depths of my body,

And upon it carried

Not so much pain as

Fear. What happened?

How badly was

I hurt?

My twin went to church and

Called our mom, saying, “The

Devil is a liar.” Now, what does

That have to do with experiencing

Injury via having lifted too much

Too heavy too many times?

It's not that I necessarily

Believed it to be bad,

But as I am no idiot,

I knew full well the

Possibilities. And that

The devil is a liar.

I know she meant maybe, hopefully

It wasn't so bad as for my guts to be

Pushing through my stomach lining.

Since she'd dropped her end twice,

And still had the wall hangings to go.

So my other sis and her husband

Came and got me and took me to be

Seen. I am not angry, but sad realizing

This is who I needed with me anyway.

Author's Note

Image: listal.com

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

It stills hurts thought doesn't it.. just a little? When you have an idea of who could or should be with you.... When you surrender that ..the ones that are mean't to be show..and your comforted and happy and yet that tiny seed of "why"...still aches where your guts are pushing through..xo excellent write..x

[Melobldnfr]

Thank you. So much. So so much. Xo.

[Eloha]

I like how you make a theme personal and use bodily metaphors to describe conceptual experience.

[Melobldnfr]

Thank you very much, Eloha. Glad you like it, and really appreciate what you've said.

[Nobody.]

I liked this. The quirky voice telling thetale makes it poetic. Made me smile 3 or 4 times while reading. Plus, I hate moving. :)

[Melobldnfr]

Thank you R.G. for reading and reviewing. I wrote this as part of my emotional healing over the event, considering the physical healing will take in total around 6 wks. I really did hurt myself. Xo.

[Nobody.]

That sucks! Sorry to hear that. Wishing you a quick recovery! Good piece, though. Your tone and voice have a magical realism quality to them that I really enjoy. Cheers!

[Melobldnfr]

Thank you so much, dear. It is getting better. I just have to be careful, not lift or strain for some time.