Take Me or Leave Me

Take Me or Leave Me

A Poem by Melobldnfr
"

Written out of trying to fight love when it's calling

"

08/17/12

 

 

Take me

Or leave me,

Either way you've

Had me.

 

From the moment you said,

"You'll be fine"

Just today!

That so happened to

Redden my cheeks

In a way that had me

So wanting to speak

And to breathe

And to feel

And to touch

And to taste

And to smell

And to steal from dreams...

To be fearless

And in your arms,

And enchant

And charm.

Leave me breathless

In your wake of realness -

Genuine and hungry.

Fed, but wanting more.

Imploring to yet again explore

You forever evermore.

 

 

 

© 2012 Melobldnfr


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There is a subtle directness about your writing really connects with me. I think maybe it is the lyricist in your heart that speaks songlike in your poetry. So, when I read ...

"And to breathe / And to feel / And to touch / And to taste / And to smell / And to steal from dreams... / To be fearless / And in your arms ..."

I am thinking, simple but bold and declarative. I thought of the Rock Opera Tommy (See me, feel me, touch me, heal me) and how powerful those words are. And that's what spoke to me hear.

And the ending, shades of Poe, taking words well known and turning them into your own ... "Imploring / explore / forever evermore". Yes, all of this works and works well. So, keep on doing those things you do and do so well.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melobldnfr

11 Years Ago

:-} Thank you so much Cilla. I am genuinely moved and motivated by the expression of your impressi.. read more



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There is a subtle directness about your writing really connects with me. I think maybe it is the lyricist in your heart that speaks songlike in your poetry. So, when I read ...

"And to breathe / And to feel / And to touch / And to taste / And to smell / And to steal from dreams... / To be fearless / And in your arms ..."

I am thinking, simple but bold and declarative. I thought of the Rock Opera Tommy (See me, feel me, touch me, heal me) and how powerful those words are. And that's what spoke to me hear.

And the ending, shades of Poe, taking words well known and turning them into your own ... "Imploring / explore / forever evermore". Yes, all of this works and works well. So, keep on doing those things you do and do so well.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melobldnfr

11 Years Ago

:-} Thank you so much Cilla. I am genuinely moved and motivated by the expression of your impressi.. read more
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Mel! The last 6 lines are delicious :) Great work and good to see you back :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


In your wake of realness -

Genuine and hungry.

Fed, but wanting more.

Imploring to yet again explore

You forever evermore..............excellent Mel

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melobldnfr

11 Years Ago

Thanks Neva. Have missed hearing from you, and am doing what I can to catch up at least some on my .. read more
The desire for more is all consuming.. do we really ever get enough when we have something that fuels us so much? excellent write..xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Melobldnfr

11 Years Ago

Thank you. Xo. I've expanded this poem in a version I just posted called "These Facets Forevermore"... read more
hmmmm crushes are both sweet and torturous. Instead of listing all of the senses (taste, touch etc) replace them with images that display those... how does he/she taste? or how does the speaker imagine him/her to taste? etc.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Melobldnfr

11 Years Ago

Thanks. And you are right. I guess the reason I didn't delve into the images of this person is bec.. read more
Melobldnfr

11 Years Ago

*See new version called "These Facets Forevermore". ;-)

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Added on August 21, 2012
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Tags: new age, contemporary, reflection, retrospection, self, love, introspection, dreams, romance, relationships, life, struggle, imagery

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Melobldnfr
Melobldnfr

Wichita, KS



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