Trying To Take My Last Breath

Trying To Take My Last Breath

A Poem by Mercutio

The poem describes being knocked down,and struggling to get back up.

                                                                             It was late at night
I had given up,I had lost my might
On the verge of death
Trying to take my last breath
I found a picture of you
I swear this is true
I remembered how much I loved you
So I forced myself up 
And I cried
Because I had f*****g lied
Too much
S**t...this is too much
Im just a kid
Oh dear god I repeat Im just a kid
Please let me live
I can no longer stand
Without your gentle hand
I no longer have a plan.

© 2014 Mercutio

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Whoa, intense and emotional.
Feels so raw, love it.
Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Feels guttural and real - nice!

Posted 8 Years Ago

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3 Reviews
Added on June 6, 2014
Last Updated on June 6, 2014
Tags: Poetry, Suicide, Night, Cussing, Teen, Lies, Depression, Lost, Picture, Love, Story, Poet, Poem, King, Death, Last breath, Help, Poison, roads, heaven, Pain, Recover, Beauty, Damn, Kid, Teenager, Boy, Dear



None, AL

Just call me Mercutio. Some of my writings are better then other. I originally tried to make myself age appropriate for everyone ,but eh Im sick of that sh*t. Im a generally nice guy,who cusses a litt.. more..

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