War Zone

War Zone

A Poem by Meshalini
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Nothing to say...

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My mouth is screaming for help,
My voice is trembling.

My eyes are seeing people suffering in pain,
I'm crying for others.

My ears are hearing the sound of blasting,
I pretend to be deaf.

My heart is telling me to help them,
I don't want to be selfish.

My hands are dragging the corpses of my loved ones,
I'm alone now.

My legs are running away from the war zone,
Crossing the border with no hopes.

© 2024 Meshalini


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I really like the use of words here in the poem! It describes the situation of a person facing war excellently!
"My ears hearing the sound of blasting,
I pretend to be deaf.

My heart telling me to help them,
I don't want to be selfish."

these lines are my personal favourite!
keep writing :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much...



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Reading this. Just reminds me how much i hate war. Its the most horrible thing the mankind have created. This is a vary strong poem,

Posted 7 Years Ago


Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much...
It is a sad world my friend. I went to Africa and Asia on water, food and medicine missions with the Red cross. War is cold and heartless. Old people, women and children pay the price for hate. Losing their home, needed food and medico treatment. Your words scary and true for too many. My question is simple. Where are the men of peace? We can organize a World cup for soccer. Whole world gather to place a game. But! we can't organized our leader to seek the end of war. I pray I know one day of peace dear Poet.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Yes friend..I agree with you...I'm also searching for the men of peace but in that time, we also mus.. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are doing well. Maybe our words can be like putting our feet into the sea and create a movement .. read more
Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thanks once again...
I really like the use of words here in the poem! It describes the situation of a person facing war excellently!
"My ears hearing the sound of blasting,
I pretend to be deaf.

My heart telling me to help them,
I don't want to be selfish."

these lines are my personal favourite!
keep writing :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much...
• My mouth screaming for help,

In general, avoid gerunds. A mouth can scream for help, but it can't screaming. As, "My mouth screams for help," you have more impact.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much....I appreciate that.....
So sad that this is a reality for so many in this day and age, praying for worldwide peace seems to simplistic but what else can a person do? - well done good work

Posted 7 Years Ago


Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your words....
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GKN
Intense and powerful writing. A sad reality for many.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Meshalini

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your time to read this....

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Added on October 5, 2016
Last Updated on January 26, 2024

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Meshalini
Meshalini

Malaysia



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