Conscience

My conception of what the conscience is.

With your revered sagacity  
determine a moral margin, 
and with a pertinacity 
appraise his actions good and sin.  
'Cause man's volition's capricious,  
susceptible to each nuance 
of colour; not e'er judicious;  
charmed by a dubious parlance 
who's not remiss of consequence.  
Temptation is ubiquitous.  
Help me resist a good pretense,  
allay what'd be iniquitous.  
Virtue is good a priori.  
You, Him aren't mere analogy.

Reviews

[Pete Langley]

This is excellent erudite poetry, but wraps up a basic truth in a parcel which hides it so that you can ultimately attribute it to divine virtue. For me, the heart of the poem is
"Charmed by a curious parlance
Whose not remiss of consequence
Temptation is ubiquitous
Help me resist a good pretence...."
The basic truth is honesty - but the problem comes in the multitudinous different interpretations of the word by man. Everyone thinks his truth is the truth! P.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe "good or sin" would work in that spot..tripped me up a bit too.

but overall..much sagacity and ubiquitous imagination supersedes the average profundity..as this piece soars.

no one is remiss of consequence and i think that no act is without impunity.

[Blackened Soul]

Awesome man I love the vocabulary. A lesser man may get lost in this, but it flows really well. And the description of the conscience is pretty spot on. The only part that kind of struck me was the line 'Appraise his actions good and sin'. It just doesn't seem to flow with the rest of the poem and kind of sticks out. Like there's too many words in it or not enough a line or two before it.