Love’s story

Love’s story

A Poem by Mia

Hold me in your words

The syl-la-bles…coming �"together

Caught in your kisses

 

Sentences only make sense

In our love

Our story continues in the spaces

Created in the ellipsis

Opportunity in all that’s unwritten

 

I have joy in my heart

And you wrote it

 

Dip your quill in my ink

…sign in

And cover me in your words  

© 2013 Mia


Author's Note

Mia
I really like this one, so I wanted to share it but I feel like it could be better…ALL help/ ANY ideas how to better it are most welcome and deeply appreciated…
Otherwise I hope you enjoy :)

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This is poetry dear Mia.
"Hold me in your words
The syl-la-bles…coming "together
Caught in your kisses"
I love the above lines. The poetry danced to perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


"Sentences only make sense

In our love

Our story continues in the spaces

Created in the ellipsis

Opportunity in all that’s unwritten "
This was soooo romantic and beautiful....:)




Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

Thank you Sami! Glad you stopped by and enjoyed!
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Yes, "cover me in your words" a sensuous line every poet will understand. So very romantic. A dreamy love poem. Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

Hi Lydi! Hope you're well..thanks for the visit :)
Enjoyed very much...no need to change a thing...Rose

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

Thanks Rose :)
this is so romantic...i wouldn't change any of it...

it is a great mix of semantics and expressions of love...

we love with our words, often...moreso than physically.

we write our hearts to another.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

"we write our hearts to another" I like that! Thank you Jacob!!
Mia - LEAVE IT ALONE!

If you can't like it as is then PUT IT AWAY. Look again in three months.

P.S. I like it as is.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

HAHA! Thank you Frank :)
you want to know how to make it better.. leave it as is

its your poem, not anyone elses..

your heart, your beauty..

which is the only way it should be written

this really is gorgeous

just like your spirit



Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

Antonio you are too good to me...thank you my friend!
Antonio Valentino

10 Years Ago

you're very welcome Mia :)
OMG I love this one Mia...the spaces between, exactly!

Dip your quill in my ink
…sign in
And cover me in your words

Sigh..simply luverly....! Favorite................................

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mia

10 Years Ago

Thank you Frieda! YOU are luverly :D

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Added on October 5, 2013
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Mia

New Orleans , LA



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